Hi first time song writer here, what do you think of this? It’s an acoustic one of mine

I’m tired of all the negative talk
Feels like it follows me around
Everybody got something to say
But none of it’s helping me now
I used to sit there and listen
To everybody speaking their mind
Getting confused half the time
Like dopamine detox solves it all
Or AI’s taking over everything

I’m working on something that’s mine now
Even if nobody’s watching me now
Say what I mean, let it come out how it comes
I don’t got time to be tearing you down

I’m putting my energy where it counts
Not getting lost in the crowd

This right here… yeah, this my first draft

Now I catch it when my mind goes there
Put the phone face down on the bed
Like the 90s with a Walkman on
Laying back, singing every song

Kinda crazy how much space you get
When you choose what you think about
I mean, I do like vegging out but
Got tired of being a carrot on the couch

I’m working on something that feels right
Not waiting till it’s all figured out
Let it be messy, let it take time
I’m not afraid of it now

I don’t need it perfect to start
I just need it honest somehow

This right here… yeah, this my first draft

It’s not finished
It’s not supposed to be

Some days I don’t even know what I’m doing
But I show up anyway

I’m working on something that’s mine now
Even if nobody hears it right now

If I got time, I’m using it right

This right here…
…my first draft

Hi i aint no native english speaker, but id consider my vocabulary on a rather advanced level. I write rap lyrics and id like to know if in order to make the lines rhyme the word "cluster" can be used instead of "play" in the line "speakers cluster hendrix"

As in "my headphones are playin jimmy hendrix"?

Verse 1:
Backseat in a Lexus
Car speeding down, voice screaming loud
This time in adolescent
We're rolling wild, our sound like our pounds
Living life like on pension
Life on the ledge, could slip with an edge
A night like this I hit the section
A night like this I learn my lesson

Verse 2:
Acting like 350 on the LX
Add 10 for a round, fully back a round
Driving off the road west
Where no rules allowed, the law don't come down
This year been a long test
But at least here and now, I can settle down
Push myself against headrest
Pouring up for the dead yes
Hope they pour when I'm dead yes
Don't clink with names cause we ain't dead yet
Feel exactly when that pen hits
Got a pool like an ocean
I'm too deep in this potion
Way too deep in a moment
Memories in recordings

Pre-Chorus:
I can't stop while I'm floating off
Lungs changing to look like my pops
I'm just lucky I ain't push a rock
Bout buy my girl a pretty rock
Cause she love while my pockets soft
And she love me when I have no sauce
Got a plan so we can never rot
Gonna live way past that 20s club

Chorus:
Section living when the pockets up
Section living I can't get enough
Section living I can't get enough
And I'm not even 21

Verse 3:
Backseat, at the exit
Nights like the Nile, a flood with a dial
Every way is our direction
Rule the world, don't need a mansion
Evil juju gotta cleanse it
Hop in the shower, be back by an hour
A night like this I tried my first hit
A night like this I had my first trip
Steady working on my patience
Work so hard I need a paycheck
Still waiting for some payment
For buildings roads for buildings pavements
(A night like this)
With all my boys saying "We made it"
That's all my boys because I made it
I ain't saying that I'm famous
I just got bread for my whole crew

(Pre-chorus repeat)

(Chorus repeats)

*Beat drops where it should "end"*

Refrain:
And I'm not even 21
And I'm not even 21

-Small instrumental break-

Chorus 2:
Exactly how many miles we need to get out of here?
Cause we can roll back an hour but we can't roll back a year
I get how it's different now, now every year is unclear
Cause we can roll up for hours, getting closer to our near (GOD)

Verse 4:
Second I leave the sphere
Give me the loudest cheer
Cause second my actual date
So I don't want any tears
I'm seeing god in here
Belief on a cloud in here
I level up a tier
See yall in my rear, skir skir disappear
My family in fear
I'm whipping swerving and pulling in lots
Without getting it cleared
But I hide from danger, I'm ducking a narc
My own cashier, dug a hole for my bank
Closed mind off from seers, Paul's vision is blank
I'm ready I'm here
Not selling a fade I do not auctioneer
I'm not sipping no beer
So pour up that fancy you save for premiers
My leaves from tree, live a organic way
And I know where it's cheap, he pulls weeds for a pay, clear

Chorus 3:
Exactly how many miles we need to get out of here?
Cause we can roll back an hour but we can't roll back a year (clear clear clear)
Cause we can roll up for hours, getting closer to near (GOD)
(GOD (GOD)
God

^[VERSE ^1]

Nothing anywhere

No sense in faking

A convenient prison of another's making

Nothing somewhere

Some force to trust in

No private locked door that they can't just bust in

.

^[CHORUS]

Nothing anywhere for bleary eyes

It's a far out sight when humanity dies

Nothing more left for me to see

This short sighted world will be the death of me

Nothing anywhere

Least not for me

.

^[VERSE ^2]

Nothing no place

No spirit to break

No natural state of being left to erase

Nothing nowhere

Nothing worth learnin'

But for things deep inside that make me a person

.

^[CHORUS]

Nothing anywhere for bleary eyes

It's a far out sight when humanity dies

Nothing more left for me to see

This short sighted world will be the death of me

Nothing anywhere

No, not for me

.

^[BRIDGE ^1]

Except maybe some mountaintop in far off Asia

Or some unknown land that they haven't razed yet

Million dollar ramblers and rectangular churches

Take my ass away Lord, this shit isn't worth it

.

^[SHORT ^INSTRUMENTAL]

.

^[BRIDGE ^2]

Eyes look harming

Crazed out faces afraid of starving

Land of plenty

Put us out of this state already

You hold the cards

We're your chips, your world's a prison yard

Love is not found

Where I sit right now is where I'm bound

.

^[CHORUS ^/ ^OUTRO]

Nothing anywhere for bleary eyes

It's a far out sight when humanity dies

Nothing more left for me to see

This short sighted world will be the death of me

Nothing anywhere

Not for me

Nothing anywhere

That I can see

Hey everyone,

I’m building a web app called Lyriq an AI songwriting workspace for people writing lyrics, hooks, rap verses, and song ideas. IT'S COMPLETELY FREE *at the moment I justr want feedback.

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• lyric continuation
• rhyme ideas
• hook generation
• improving weak lines
• punchline/wordplay suggestions
• genre, mood, and style-based writing sessions
• beat-aware lyric direction
• personal “Writing DNA” based on your own writing style

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I’m looking for a few songwriters, rappers, and producers to try the early version and give honest feedback.

I’d especially love to know:

• Does it actually help you write?
• What feels useful?
• What feels generic or bad?
• What would make you come back to it?
• What would make it worth paying for?

It’s still early, so bugs and rough edges are expected, but I’m trying to shape it around real writers rather than guessing.

Feedback would be massively appreciated.

I’ve been working on hook driven songwriting especially how phrasing, flow and word choice can make or break a line.

I come from novel and film writing (currently developing a horror film), so I tend to approach songs with a strong focus on imagery, storytelling and structure.

I’m also a 3x ISC Semi Finalist (2021, 2023, 2025 including recognition in the lyrics category, 15,000+ submissions).

I’d like to do a few short 1:1 Zoom sessions around 20 minutes, free and go deeper on lyrics and hooks with some of you.

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I won’t be able to do many maybe around 10 but I’m curious to see what people here are working on.

If you want to join:

1. Tell me what kind of music you’re making (genre, style, references, overall vibe)
2. Describe how you usually write (emotion vs imagination, how you start melody, lyrics, concept, etc.)
3. Share a few lines or your favorite part of a song you’ve written (or something you’re currently working on)

I’ll go through everything and pick a few people to work with. Whether you’re a singer, producer or songwriter looking to improve your lyrics and take your writing more seriously or aiming to make a living with music and move into it professionally feel free to join. Let’s dive into your lines : )

This is a lyric i literally just wrote, and want to know if i'm any good. What are some recommendations you suggest? this is probably the chorus of an uncompleted song.

You got into your parents vodka drawer

laughing because you can’t taste it anymore

kissing her sun tinted skin, fall into her rip current

while my bottled letters pollute the shore

also can you tell me your interpretation of it THANKS

Sunshine pop/psychedelic 60s type of song

[Verse 1]

She's beautiful as the morning dawn.

She's beautiful as the sunset.

She's beautiful as the fields of France.

She's beautiful as summer.

[Bridge]

She walks through the street.

And the moon goes with her.

She talks and the wind treats.

Her voice like a wave.

[Verse 2]

She's beautiful as a sunflower.

She's beautiful as the light.

She's beautiful as clear water.

She's beautiful as liberty.

[Bridge]

Her voice singing must be.

What people hear when they go to heaven.

I'll fight for her happiness.

And her kisses must feel like.

Being touched by god.

[Verse 3]

She's beautiful as her voice.

She's beautiful as her hair.

She's beautiful as her smile.

She's beautiful as her words.

[Verse 1]

I regret every word, I couldn't say the right way

When a dark entity hijacks my fingers

And types for my brain

Tragic angels rising from below

Even they don’t know where we are or go

[Pre-Chorus]

It’s inevitable, we don’t know anything

We were never meant to know

What we truly know within

[Chorus x2]

A sunny place but she can’t show her face

The wrong country, the wrong time, wrong place

She loves but they say no way

Torn apart, torn away

[Verse 2]

I’ve never seen a smile

That can light the world like yours

It’s simply radiant, I need it more

With every day that goes by

You’re so kind, with a brain unlike mine

That knows exactly every single moment I lie

You laugh it off, but inside you worry

Because a small part of us dies

[Bridge x2]

(A sunny place but she can’t show her face)

(The wrong country, the wrong time, wrong place)

(She loves but they say no way)

(Torn apart, torn away)

[Chorus x2]

[Outro]

(Torn apart, torn away)

[Chorus x3]

Alright, new to the song side of this, but been writing for years, sad to say this took 13 years to get to this point. And I think it may be done. Still learning guitar but I feel a bluesy kinda thing to it. Be brutally honest, it’s what I want. Open criticism.

That Freckle in Your Eye

There’s a spot on your eye, most folks’d never see
Little fleck of gold, like it was hid for me
Not loud like the sunrise, not wild like the sea
Just a quiet kind of magic, sittin’ where it oughta be

Didn’t shout for attention, didn’t beg to be found
But it held my whole world when you looked around

That freckle in your eye, yeah it outshined the stars
Like a firefly flicker in the dark of my heart
Like a lone church light on a back dirt road
Like a spark in the night when the cold wind blows
Now every sky’s too empty, every dream runs dry
‘Cause I ain’t seen heaven since that freckle in your eye

It was small like a raindrop on a window pane
Like a penny heads-up in the pourin’ rain
Like a coal burnin’ low when the fire’s gone dim
But it warmed up my soul every time you’d grin

Yeah the world’s full of wonders, but none of ‘em stay
Like that little piece of forever driftin’ away

That freckle in your eye, yeah it outshined the stars
Like a lighthouse glow when you’re lost too far
Like a match struck quick in the dead of night
Like a preacher’s truth in a barroom fight
Now every road’s too lonely, every mile runs wide
‘Cause I ain’t seen heaven since that freckle in your eye

Now I search in the skyline, every shimmer and spark
In the bourbon reflection, in the glass in the dark
But the world don’t shine like it used to do
It all lost its color when I lost you

That freckle in your eye, yeah it outshined the stars
Like a last call song on a worn-out guitar
Like a whispered prayer that you don’t say twice
Like a roll of the dice that lands just right
Now every night’s a shadow, every dawn’s a lie
‘Cause I ain’t seen heaven since that freckle in your eye

Yeah it’s funny what you miss when it’s gone for good
A little speck of light nobody understood
But to me it was everything I can’t deny…
That freckle in your eye… yeah, that freckle in your eye.