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Distance.

Distance.

A week, a month, a year

Every time I hear from you, I shed a tear

At the end of the night, I just wish you were here

Because of my past. I know you fear

My intentions weren't always clear

I'm a new me, and I promise I care.

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u/Significant-Gear-444 — 20 hours ago

At the Altar

Let me kneel at the altar of your personage,
feel the presence of your beauty, know the power of your cruelty.
Let my lungs fill with terror projected toward the heavens, that falls in beams of love through colored pane.
Let me weep softly o'er intricate patterned stone,
that mingles in the shadows, that chills me to the bone.
Let me kneel at the altar of your personage,
wait for your light alone, and if light I shall not see, I'll leave my heart upon this stone.

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u/KlorineCowboy — 1 day ago

Love Keeps Vigil

They say
if you love somebody
you let them go.

As if happiness needs distance
from the ones you love.

Have you ever had children?

Would you let them go?

And I don’t mean
let them grow up.

Let them become someone.

Let them find love itself.

I mean could you teach your heart at its core
to stop reaching for them,
so they could smile without you.

No.

That’s not how love works.

Love does not practice goodbye
until it numbs into resignation.

Love keeps vigil.

Love stands guard.

Love bleeds.

And maybe that is its paroxysm.

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u/Icy_Sport2597 — 1 day ago

Reflections on the River

Hi, I made my first ever poem today, please let me know you think!

~

I like to watch rivers flow;
on the side it wanders right-to-left.
For the reflections are like time passing;
constant, partly clear and unmet.

Each streamline paints a different picture;
soft strokes of water that never end.
For change works in similar ways;
unpredictable, inevitable and always there.

Hear the locals intertwining, and birds reuniting
Hear the trees whisper sayings in the air.
For in a world so chaotic; an environment so erratic,
The noises in reflections go bare.

~

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u/RH_photographs — 1 day ago

All That I Thought I Knew

Everything I feel is at the tip of my tongue
Ready to come out
But I can only play you the songs
From all the playlists you inspire

Because I can’t say what I want to say

My cheeks ache from all the laughter you cause
I lie awake thinking
What if every day and night could be like this
And what would we be if you ever found out

Because we’re friends, and I’m already too far in

I smile when you smile
When I passed you the card
Did we linger for a little while
Treading the line,
I’m secretly hoping for a sign

I live in the clouds
Your feet are on earth
You’re leaving soon and you’ll say goodbye
Yet I make plans with you in my mind

Because I want you closer even though I know you need to go

The world feels a little brighter
Then you enter the frame
The brightness fades into the background
And suddenly I’m searching for everything

Because I wasn’t supposed to feel like this so soon
And because I thought I already knew love’s tune

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u/Fuzzy-Panda-8180 — 1 day ago

Sex

Sex

Sex is the strangest, cruelest thing God ever made.

Some people crave it like air. Some sip it once a week.Some never touch it again.I drown everyone who gets close, then try to drown myself. Since I was nine the darkness has lived in me. Depression wrapped its hands around my throat while porn lit a fire in my small body trembling hands stroking raw in the dark, chasing something I couldn’t finish, just burning and burning. I stood on the edge of a bridge,

wind whipping my face, hoping I would lose my balance and finally fall. I pressed knives against my skin, felt the cold edge, too scared to cut,

Too scared to live.

At ten they dragged me behind the wall.

A girl forced my dick into her mouth.I cried silently while my body learned it could be used.

At thirteen I had sex. She was warm and alive around me. That same night she killed herself. I carried her silence like another blade against my wrist.

Two years ago a man locked my girlfriend in the bathroom.

He groped her, forced his dick into her mouth.

She told me everything. I held her while she shook. I swore I would never be that man.

Tonight she looked at me with the trust she was still trying to rebuild. She whispered stop. Soft. Scared. Breaking.I heard her. I felt her body freeze the same way it froze in that bathroom.

And for ten unforgivable seconds

I kept going...moving inside her, chasing the same old fire, raping the one person who still loved me after everything she had already survived. When she shoved me off, the room died.

I collapsed and cried like something being torn apart from the inside. Great heaving sobs that ripped my chest open until I vomited everything

hot, sour, choking, kneeling in my own mess, shaking like that nine-year-old boy again.

The same boy who stood on bridges.

The same boy who held knives to his skin.

The same hands that just became the monster I swore I would never be.

I looked at her face

the fear, the betrayal, the love I murdered

and my heart finally broke the way it should have broken every single time I wanted to die. I don’t know how I could do this to her. After everything she survived, I became the next man who hurt her. I am the monster I feared I would become. The depression never left. The suicidal thoughts never left. They just waited for me to prove that I really don’t deserve to be here.

I don’t want forgiveness.

I don’t want tomorrow.

I just want the courage

to finally let go of the bridge railing

or press the knife hard enough this time.

Because I hurt the only person

who made me want to stay alive.

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u/Few-Writer78 — 2 days ago

Is poetry becoming a joke?

Having read a few poems by the latest winner of the Dylan Thomas Prize for under 39s, it seems that anyone can be a poet. Just write a list of your thoughts or what you did or is in your apartment and there you go, a prize winner! No kintsugi just nonsense dressed up..

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u/ExpressionMassive672 — 4 days ago
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a dream

I'll straighten out the collar of your shirt while we talk

Will you then know the love I hold for you

I might put my head on your shoulder

And yours slowly shifting on top of mine

Your hand will hold my waist

In that moment I'd swirl with emotions

In the concave of love

Both sure of eachother

As if time waited for them

The wind shy

The sky in awe

Guys don't just read and go tell me what it made you feel and give feedbacks or atleast an upvote so the post can reach others too

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u/just__existinghere — 3 days ago

Erase

Sneering down their nose

We are treated like foes

Beneath their feet we tread

Toiling just to be fed

Shoring their numbers with welcoming arms

We are too ignorant to be alarmed

Erasing our culture

Pecked on like a vulture

Misinformation is paid

Watch as we fade

They pass their bills

Forced to swallow like bitter pills

Conquer and divide

We now have no pride

Once we were golden

Now just beholden

They slowly drained our might

We didn't even put up a fight

Power and money they soak

Making us the butt of the joke

Throwing our money far away

We open our mouth but have no say

With iron hands they hold tightly

While we tiptoe lightly

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u/Legitimate-Sail-5747 — 2 days ago

This is a poem

this is a poem
it has 2 stanzas
this is one
i cant think of a rhyme scheme
so i will include none

this is a poem
that looks much better in a trashcan
because every time that i write
nobody seems to understand

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u/Original-Economy4898 — 3 days ago

Heartsong

In the beginning, he pondered the tale

A journey through shadows

Where all dreams set sail;

With each twist of fate, he crafted his path,

Turning sorrow to joy and

Escaping the wrath.

Time dance with the sun,

Casting warmth on his heart

As love whispered softly

igniting the spark.

in the blink of an eye

Reality blurred

A canvas of moments, where

All hope was stirred.

With a pen as his wand

He conjured the past

Building castles of sand

Where memories last.

Wisdom etched deep

in the lines of his face;

Just a traveler of the worlds

Seeking his place.

Through shadows, he wandered

From light into dark

Finding God in the shadows

igniting the spark

Each truth that he held,

A reflection of grace

A tapestry woven

Unique in its space.

The masses may chuckle

But he knows the score;

For life is a journey

With lesson lessons galore.

in meadows of thought

Where his spirit takes flight

He waits for her presence

To bask in the light.

So let flowers bloom

And words intertwine

Love is the essence

That makes life divine

Through echoes of laughter

The whispers and sighs.

His solace is knowing

Sweet love will come by.

by Joel

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u/Objective-Form-6121 — 4 days ago

Who’s plan?

Everyone says gods plan. Well the devil has a plan too. Let’s talk about that or are you too uncomfortable to speak both sides. God is appearance and the devil is running interference so for every plan there is a counter attack. Hope you’re fast enough to react. Otherwise your choice is taken and your fate intact.

Who’s plan is right? Depends how good you fight. Are you strong or weak? Make sure you whisper when you speak, and don’t ever over think. One on the left, one in the right. They fight to entertain they already know your inner light regardless of how bright.

Shine hard enough to prove your worth a chance or join the devil and be a puppet to his hellish dance. It’s a dance that never stops. Not even after your body drops. It’s exhausting and they’re always watching.

Gods plan is that we don’t sin, if we do repent or we are damned. Praise him, hands help high. Sounds like the mass suicide guy. A cult. They talk in tongues and praise the lord. They say he’s healed and he’s a miracle but this mother fucker hasn’t talked, it’s all just spiritual. We have to have face to have faith? Go to church, spend money because god will give us peace after death. What about peace before death because this life has no peace.

The devils plan is we sin, we live our lives and try to be happy until the end. We can sin all day and repent so we play with the devil and ask god for forgiveness. Shit makes no sense. If this is the way we live then we are playing with the devil and then do a walk of shame. Go ask god to forgive you then we keep playing the game. The devils plan is to give people their desires then they get it and wanna plea to a higher power. It’s all a big puzzle and without all the pieces you can never complete the picture.

I have my own plan and i am not afraid to say god is just like my father, absent and abusive in unimaginable ways. I won’t put everything into anyone who gives nothing back. I’m going to live my life, for me and me alone. I won’t praise and I won’t beg to an idea we are taught to believe. I’m using my own brain and say fuck heaven and hell. Until the day I do imma do right by me and where I end up? One day I’ll see.

Life after death but only exist while living. Sounds like a L to me and I’m cool on who they want me to be. Imma live while I’m alive. I’ll have time to rest finally once I die. Heaven or hell we all wonder but I’m willing to bet it’s just 6 feet under.

CRC
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u/Holiday_Carrot_1744 — 3 days ago

Asomnia, or the time I fell asleep in a sand-box

(Note: forgive the dots. I can't figure out how to format on Reddit. Pretend they are spaces.)

When I finished bathing, scrubbing away

...the soap bubbles clinging onto my skin, like

......carbonation scrubbed flat by

.........forgetfulness, I didn't blink. I didn't dare:

............my eyelids were sticky with swirling soft

..............drinks and I was scared they would be

...................sealed by sugar crash.

/

So, I towelled myself with hot sand, left to

...dry and be turned glass

......in the sun’s holistic heat. I lay

.........in shifting silt, making sand angels

............with the fanning of my arms, or

...............perhaps I was fanning the solar stove

..................above me.

/

And as the sand dried around me, encasing

...the fleshy corset of my torso, it

......turned like cracking clay. And then

..........I realised, it had become

.............a kiln to lie in.

................And I realised there was nothing I

..................could do to stay awake…

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u/The-Pentegram — 3 days ago

Everyone

Everyone's talking about it:

On the tv,
In stores,
In the schools,
On the radio,
In whispers

Kids cling to the mothers,
Lovers embrace,
Dogs whimper,
Anchormen speak
and
we all sit around
waiting
for it
to
end.

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u/Dwight_Fart-Shrute — 3 days ago

Dancing In The Rain

Here I am, stranded, all alone on a beach.
Drowning in a storm, way too far beyond reach.
The sand stinging my skin with worries and doubt.
The sky crying out in a miserable shout.
The clouds wailing, their tears drenching my skin.
Lightning wrestling the thunder, making a big din.
Waves of sorrow violently slamming me down.
Beaten, bruised, betrayed, and left to drown.
A tide of remorse, just eating me away.
Yet, I can only pretend to be okay.

Then suddenly, I realized that I am no longer alone.
That I don’t have to be all on my own.
In that very moment, I chose to abandon the pain.
I got up, and started to dance in the rain.
The waves stopped, and turned to listen.
The lightning and thunder quietened their din.
The clouds began to dry their tears,
And slowly but surely, the sun appears.
He shares a ray of light with me.
And with a smile, he sets me free.

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u/cherryred_xoxo — 4 days ago

Common beds

I might make myself disappear for now, I might fool myself into a plan to make everything right, To sleep and flee through the shade on the ceiling, But I have to be genuine for one noble night.

These common beds leave no trace for suffering, When the shadows grow, they hide what has been left, I do not like to be reminded of how I managed to stay awake, Winds blow, whispers flow, the night comes with different effects.

I got to know the streets in my overwhelming anxiety; There was no need for all those days to pass, But I did not pass by, nor did I forget; rather, I stood still, And when this surge of comfort came to pass, I was the last.

Common beds shun any person with an empty side It's simple, and It's true, as it always has been from the start, I see nothing worth changing while I sense the change, I'm scared, On these beds, I'm smart, I'm new, I'm creative, all the things that served the plot.

The night could hide me while I'm falling apart; Everyone now has a memory that can hold up to the common beds, Everyone can sleep now with a near-still heart.

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u/Left_Wrangler3364 — 4 days ago

Populus Omnia

Why is it,

The water clumps break down
Ambiguous boundaries—
Between you and me.

Delicately pick yourself apart.
Don’t you see the pieces of me?
Carefully rubble through 
The jumbled mess of yourself.
Don’t you see the paint of me?

You and I—

Am I you,
Are you me,

Perhaps we may never recognize it
For our whole lives—
But hold the gift
The sky sends down.
Take one step forward,
And at last, we shall become us.

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u/Famous_Cook_6228 — 4 days ago