u/Hot-Lingonberry-6735

VOLUME WARNING
A little something I made futzing around on bandlab! I want to port it into reaper since my laptop just came in today from being repaired!! I got some advice from music feedback and tried to apply it, like lowering the bass some EQing and making the song a little more focused, but obviously theres still a lot I can improve. I tried automation but I may have messed things up more cuz listening back some stuff is a little too loud. For the “i feel myself losing power” something feels off besides my pitchy ass vocals lol. Should I make that segment in a lower key or slow down the bpm of the song overall to alleviate it, or is there something else I could do? I think all the other lyrics fit into a pocket nicely but I want to improve that part without changing the words themselves too much. I’d love any advice be it technical or à matter of taste . I want this song to feel more alive if that makes sense? Thanks if you give me a listen.

Lyrics if that interests you:

I made a fatal mistake
I made an awkward mistep
I forgot to plug myself in
And I overslept

Still I've got to go I know that
Don't have the minutes not a second I can't go back
But I know I'm out of time
Beep and a “low battery sign”

Losing losing losing loosing
I feel myself losing power
All my mortal energy
All my mortal enemies
Choosing choosing choosing choosing
that I'd rather be devoured
All my mortal memories
All the mortal friends to me

Feels like if been rewired
I just skimmed the booklet
More reading required
Not a forum where I can inquire?
Think im rotting
Think I might expire

Losing losing losing loosing
I feel myself losing power
All my mortal energy
All my mortal enemies
Choosing choosing choosing choosing
that I'd rather be devoured
All my mortal memories
All the mortal friends to me
(Know-know-know im out of time)

Made this for my friend’s brothers birthday last year. I still like it so I wanted to share :) even if the anatomy is a little iffy— i dont draw a lot of animals lol

I made this for my friend’s brother’s birthday last year and I never posted it. The anatomy is a bit questionable but i still kind of like it. Song playing is setting sun by you’ll never get to heaven

Laptops broken rn so I tried messing about on bandlab. Also gave automation à try, it’s kinda hard on a mobile device lol. I have some vocals too but theyre not that great so I figured I would try and see how I can improve the beat itself. Any feedback would be super appreciated.

À beat im working on, I have vocals but theyre not that great so I kinda wanna improve on the beat itself first before adding anything on top. What could I do different/better?

Hi!! Im running out of old art to put over the videos as click bait 🤧 I should draw more i guess.

But yeah obviously im a bit better at drawing than music or video editing (i legit cutoff the beginning five seconds of my screen recording by accident) so could you lmk anything that would improve this? It can be technical advice or taste idk I just always have a hard time putting my finger on what’s wrong with stuff my ears aren’t that good 😔. I have like a minute snd s half more of “song” in mind but I figured I’d see what I can fix first

I accidentally deleted a track around the “he said” part so it’s really quiet and nearly unintelligible im just hearing that now 😭 so I hope you can hear me probably not 😔

Thanks if you give me a listen!

Lyrics if that interest you:

Long roads I once traversed,

Every word twice rehearsed

Waiting in vain, impatient for the day

that I could leave in a hearse

Until I ran into that world-weary traveler

Reduced from king of nothing to a humble listener

He said for all you want in this life

The secret is to stay in motion

If you ever let your feet stop

Then Youll surely never step again

So don’t let your eyes cloud

With the milk of their ambrosia

Their poison wasnt meant for you

Turn the noise into chromesthesia

Don’t let it phase you

(Aphasia)

Don’t let it phase you

(Aphasia)

Dont let it phase you

(Aphasia)

(Aphasia)

(Aphasia)

(I want to do an electronic breakdown idk how to do that well yet tho, and then this isn’t included yet either)

Color bleeds into my trachea

Brought fourth to your very ears

Every peak I take on

Makes worthwhile every shed tear

And I’ll lose my baby fat

Snd shed feathers over time

Snd maybe once my voice drops

I’ll bring the color back to your (eyes/life)

Hello! I have a lot more of this “done” like lyrics, some iffy vocals and everything but as it stands what could I do to improve this? Like EQing, composition, everything in between snd what I could add or what sounds off. This is a little boring but ive been trying to do too much in the last few things ive made so I figured maybe I could maybe make something simpler sound okay. Full run time is prolly like 2.5-3.5 minutes :D I appreciate you taking the time to listen!