Idk it’s just a bit weird and being in the midst of producing my first EP and in the final run of assessments at university I don’t really have time to do anything with it for now. Not gonna write a full song around it for a while so thought I’d share it for now cause it’s too sick to sit in my cold cases folder for the next few months without me sharing 🔥
Hey guys, it’s me, the guy from the stolen tongues thread
I’m here again to anger y’all with my opinions so, hiii xxxx
Much like last time, my title is partially hyperbole so, don’t hurt me, I’m too young to die.
So a lot of yall seemed to miss what I was saying in my post on stolen tongues. All of yall were showing up like “I personally found it pretty scary” and missed the part where I said like 3 times that it has good scares and that’s not the issue. So let’s try this again.
Hidden webpage also has fantastic scares. Love the part with the internet cafe where there’s the dude who knocks back in the bathroom stall and the creepy dog. Also the bit with bee men in the house is pretty good. But, let’s talk plot again.
I’m well aware that the point of the story is, he’s stuck in the hole (been there, brother 🔥) and every time he pulls the thread a little further and uncovers more of the mystery the hole throws more random shit at him to confuse and distract him and avoid him from working it out and escaping. It’s a great concept, but I struggle with the plot, or seeming lack there of.
The issue is, (and this is all my opinion so… free country) that though it ramps up, it runs the same pattern over and over continuously. He pulls the thread a little more, gets distracted with some scares (good scares, don’t come at me) and then survives cause they can’t actually do anything to him like the ghosts in sinister, and then he gets out and comes back to pull the thread a little more. Rinse and repeat over and over until he gets out at the end. But in terms of plot, other than scares, “moments” that we remember, like him hiding under the bed with people in the house, or the internet cafe like I mentioned previously, the actual journey and story seems completely missing. I get that the confusing nature of the story is a narrative device in itself to reflect the narrators own confusion, but I think it suffers forgettability because of that. I couldn’t tell you a single plot beat or narrative arc throughout the entire story as opposed to small moments or scares that take place within what would be the narrative.
Much like last time, this is all imo so, if yall disagree, all power to you and I still love you xxx
And also like last time, I’ll put my money where my mouth is and link one of my own works below so yall can judge me accordingly if you so choose
https://www.reddit.com/r/scarystories/s/2lyByOqec2
Ok thanks guys, byeeeeeeee xxxxxx 👻