Question about pacing and tension — horror comic opening (5 pages)
I’m working on the first issue of a horror comic and wanted feedback on a few specific things.
The premise: a man returns to his apartment late at night, but the door number doesn’t match his key. He goes in anyway, and everything inside looks correct—but feels unnatural, like it was recreated. Then something enters, and the exit disappears.
What I’m trying to figure out:
Does the pacing feel too slow before the reveal on page 4–5?
Should I introduce something “off” earlier to hook the reader faster?
Is the transition from unease → threat clear enough visually?
Does the apartment feel “wrong” in a way that comes across on the page?
I’m specifically trying to improve tension and clarity, so any focused feedback on those would help a lot.
u/Spartawolf592 — 14 hours ago