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Title: The Bozo Dojo

Genre: Comedy

Format: tv pilot

Page length: 31

Logline: An autistic comedian absent-mindedly navigates the egos and drugs of Denver's most underperforming comedy club.

Link: https://drive.google.com/file/d/13NnT-doMDylimcXmNcJiGWZ8VCWDQvH1/view?usp=sharing

Specific concerns: I'm not stoked on the title but can't think of anything else. Also the logline probably needs work if anyone has feedback on that. But in terms of writing how is it? This is the first screenplay I wrote and I haven't really gone back and proper edited and rewritten it before. Also are the scene directions stuff right?

so what next?

Thanks for reading!