u/lolidc101

CONTEXT of this scene:

Elina is a little girl that Aurelio met shortly after being turned and essentially she’ll grow close with him and he teaches her faith and praying and all that and so although it takes a bit in the beginning with them 2, she grows on him.

Now this is years later him seeing her again after she moved all those years ago but now she’s an old lady on her death bed.

Plot: A Aurelio is/was a devoted Catholic monk named whose life is destroyed after he is turned into something cursed which is essentially a vampire, although I’m still trying to figure out what to call it in my world. The story is very gothic, tragic, and heavily focused on faith, guilt, suffering, and redemption.

But Instead of becoming evil, Aurelio spends centuries trying to remain faithful to God despite believing he has been permanently separated from Him. He refuses to feed on humans, he lives in isolation, and continues helping people, praying, and carrying his faith even while holy places like a chapel and religious symbols like a crucifix physically burn him and hurts him.

A huge part of the story is his relationship with God and the idea of loving something you believe you can never truly reach again. It’s less of a horror story and more of an emotional tragedy about like exile, hope, and what it means to keep believing even when you think you’re beyond forgiveness.

So I’ve always loved the idea of writing a book ever since I was a kid, for example, we had to read one chapter in 5th grade of a children’s book. I can’t seem to remember the name of, but I wrote four pages front and back about one chapter while everyone else did about half a page and in middle school I always thought about writing my own zombie book and I never got far but I was about five pages in, writing on the front and back as well.

Now here I am at 21 and I had this idea for a book and I’m scared to share the idea because in my head it’s a good idea but I heard a wise person say if you give one idea to four writers, you’ll have four different books so that kind of makes me feel comfortable.

Basically, my story is about a deeply devoted Catholic monk named Aurelio whose life is destroyed after he is turned into something cursed — essentially a vampire, though I’m still trying to figure out what to call it in my world. The story is very gothic, tragic, and heavily focused on faith, guilt, suffering, and redemption.
Instead of becoming evil, Aurelio spends centuries trying to remain faithful to God despite believing he has been permanently separated from Him. He refuses to feed on humans, lives in isolation, and continues helping people, praying, and carrying his faith even while holy places and religious symbols physically burn him.
A huge part of the story is his relationship with God and the idea of loving something you believe you can never truly reach again. It’s less of a horror story and more of an emotional tragedy about exile, hope, and what it means to keep believing even when you think you’re beyond forgiveness.
I’m aiming for a melancholic gothic style with a lot of atmosphere and emotional dialogue, and I’d genuinely appreciate feedback on the prose, pacing, themes, dialogue, or anything else that stands out. I’m still early into writing it, so I’m very open to criticism and suggestions

TL;DR: It’s a gothic tragedy about a deeply faithful Catholic monk who becomes cursed into a vampire-like creature and spends centuries trying to stay devoted to God despite believing he can never enter heaven. Instead of becoming evil, he lives in self-denial, helps others, and struggles with faith, guilt, loneliness, and redemption. It’s more emotional/spiritual tragedy than horror.