u/New-Asparagus-4826

Title: Kingfish
Format: Feature
Page Length: 30 Pages
Genre: Crime/Romance
Logline: An American gangster sent to Japan to kill a rival mob boss falls for a mysterious woman, unaware she is his target’s daughter.

Script: https://drive.google.com/file/d/1ZTHEcjOkInyzi-waO9MRFVAdAXOcMzWi/view?usp=drivesdk

- let me know how the readability is.

- what you liked, what you didn’t like.

- stuff it reminds you of or reminded you of.

- also, OBVIOUSLY ITS NOT DONE. so take that into account while giving feedback.

Title: Kingfish
Page Length: 22 (CURRENTLY)
Format: Feature
Genre: Crime/Romance
Logline: An American gangster sent to Japan to kill a rival mob boss falls for a mysterious woman, unaware she’s his target’s daughter.

Script: https://drive.google.com/file/d/1lpUkdT8pfOh3IYUTN5eCVMn\_lV-zkrA0/view?usp=drivesdk

- OBVIOUSLY NOT FINISHED.

- I’m looking for feedback on the dialogue, the readability, proper technique, technical details, and the interest into the script.

- YES I KNOW that you will have questions about the plot because the story isn’t finished. but that’s not what I’m concerned with.

Title: American Football
Format: Short Film
Pages: 16
Genre: Crime/Drama
Logline: A drug fueled couple holds a gas station clerk hostage, forcing him through a deadly game of trivia, revolving around American Football.

Script: https://drive.google.com/file/d/1tPtaH5RR8Ifc5N8c-Zbg8uHgKpDX\_aOU/view?usp=drivesdk

- a little practice short before I continue writing my western (currently at 48 pages)

- let me know anything you liked, didn’t like, any clarification type questions, ANYTHING.

Title: American Football
Format: Short Film
Pages: 16
Genre: Crime/Drama
Logline: A drug fueled couple holds a gas station clerk hostage, forcing him through a deadly game of trivia, revolving around American Football.

Script: https://drive.google.com/file/d/1tPtaH5RR8Ifc5N8c-Zbg8uHgKpDX\_aOU/view?usp=drivesdk

- a little practice short before I continue writing my western (currently at 48 pages)

- let me know anything you liked, didn’t like, any clarification type questions, ANYTHING.

Title: American Football
Format: Short Film
Pages: 16
Genre: Crime/Drama
Logline: A drug fueled couple holds a gas station clerk hostage, forcing him through a deadly game of trivia, revolving around American Football.

Script: https://drive.google.com/file/d/1tPtaH5RR8Ifc5N8c-Zbg8uHgKpDX\_aOU/view?usp=drivesdk

- a little practice short before I continue writing my western (currently at 48 pages)

- let me know anything you liked, didn’t like, any clarification type questions, ANYTHING.

Title: American Football
Format: Short Film
Pages: 16
Genre: Crime/Drama
Logline: A drug fueled couple holds a gas station clerk hostage, forcing him through a deadly game of trivia, revolving around American Football.

Script: https://drive.google.com/file/d/1tPtaH5RR8Ifc5N8c-Zbg8uHgKpDX\_aOU/view?usp=drivesdk

- a little practice short before I continue writing my western (currently at 48 pages)

- let me know anything you liked, didn’t like, any clarification type questions, ANYTHING.

Title: American Football
Format: Short Film
Pages: 16
Genre: Crime/Drama
Logline: A drug fueled couple holds a gas station clerk hostage, forcing him through a deadly game of trivia, revolving around American Football.

Script: https://drive.google.com/file/d/1tPtaH5RR8Ifc5N8c-Zbg8uHgKpDX\_aOU/view?usp=drivesdk

- a little practice short before I continue writing my western (currently at 48 pages)

- let me know anything you liked, didn’t like, any clarification type questions, ANYTHING.

Title: American Football
Format: Short
Page Length: 13 Pages
Genre: Crime/Drama
Logline: drug fueled couple holds a gas station clerk hostage, forcing him through a deadly game of trivia, revolving around American Football.

Script: https://drive.google.com/file/d/1w7YFKLV\_\_oZ5wVGYXYBCcb5vTiAnLYvW/view?usp=drivesdk

- any sort of feedback positive or negative is much appreciated.

- anything you notice when finished reading.

- I only made this short as a little practice for a bigger western I’m writing (48 pages)