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I’m writing the backstory of the villain of my first book. I write as a hobby, and really just want to improve.
I need advice on the following scene. How can I make it more impactful and dramatic? How to express excruciating physical pain better? How to make characters react to immense loss in a realistic way?

u/Extension-Key5630 — 7 days ago