I've posted on here before and this is just the first page and a half of my story and i hope ive improved it ive been working on balancing my dialogue, narrative, and action so if anyone has any pointers on if im doing well or if im doing something wrong what is it thanks!
The story is only halfway finished im at the halfway point and i'm looking for feedback it's called Personified a few days ago i got some feedback on how i should try to bring in more narrative action but i'm not quite sure how to do that and ive also been working on adding in more description into my writing so any constructive criticism would be welcome thanks!
It's called Personified it's only about 4000 words though im only at the halfway point i just edited it and i want more feedback on what i should edit (some things are intentional like the weird capitalization and ive been trying to include more description for the surroundings since im not all that good at description)