First song - stuck between two lines
Hi Reddit,
First time poster but I’ve been really enjoying this community. A lot of talented folks here and since I don’t have formal music training would love your feedback
If there’s anything you think I can improve I welcome constructive criticism
Specifically, I’m also torn between two lines in the chorus. Here are the lyrics:
I was thinking today
I’d get a tattoo
Of your name
Of your name
It is written
All over my soul
Might as well
Be on my flesh
Though I know we can’t be together
I wrote our names on fresh cement
So that at least that could last forever
We were there, it’s evidence
(Or, our names together, some permanence)
Thanks for listening 🩵