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Spider-Man Homecoming Rewrite

Spider-Man Homecoming, while being a great film, struggles in the categories of adapting the character of Peter Parker along with his mythos. I am aware that Marvel Studios did have certain restrictions and limitations while adapting the character. So I will try to keep that in mind.

Peter’s Characterization:

Peter in the Civil War movie was perfect. Lighthearted, energetic, sarcastic, snarky, and funny. He wasn’t afraid to make fun of the other heroes or quip jokes. This is something that is constant in the other times the Russo Brothers wrote Peter in the MCU. Infinity War and Endgame. This characterization should be constant, and put into the MCU Spider-Man Solo Movies. He’s snarky and sarcastic. He’s not a pushover or a loser. He’ll crack jokes about others, make fun at bullies, etc.

Side Characters:

Flash will be recasted. I think everybody can agree that the MCU Flash is just… horrible. Flash should be two things. A jock/bully with a hidden heart of gold. And Spidey’s biggest Fanboy.

Ned is replaced with Randy Robertson. The character of Ned in the MCU is just Gankey from Miles’ stories. Leave Miles’ mythos alone. Randy can have the same role Ned does in the movie.

The original Herman Shultz Shocker is the same for the entire movie. Killing him off is dumb. Also, give him a more comic accurate suit look.

Uncle Ben/Aunt May:

I’m fine with Uncle Ben not being mentioned by name specifically. Aswell as his origin not being shown. But we should get some hints of it. May is still getting over Ben’s death. She’s not just happy-go-lucky. She is struggling. But she puts a brave face on. You can even have a picture of Ben (I imagine played by Adam Scott). Peter’s suit that he wears to Homecoming can be one of Ben’s old suits.

MJ/Deleted Scenes:

First of all, Zendaya should have her hair died red for the movie. I would also prefer if it was straightened as well. Also, let her name actually be Mary Jane Watson. Keep the scene of Aunt May and Peter offering her a ride as it seems no one is coming to pick her up, showing that she possibly might have a hard home life. Also keep in the deleted scene of Peter and MJ on the bleachers, as she explains why she has her attitude of not pretending or caring. Also keep in the flyer scene of Peter joking about how his parents are dead at the party. I know it’s an odd thing to keep in, but it shows that Peter might actually have some trauma or stored up feelings about his parents and is joking about it. Something a lot of people, especially younger people, do. Also, we’re CUTTING the scene of Tony calling Peter abroad. It’s unnecessary, and its only function is to give Tony more screen time.

Peter’s strength:

In his non-solo appearances MCU Spider-Man is a TANK. He catches Bucky’s arm easily, then solos both Bucky and Falcon without a sweat. He catches a punch from Cull Obsidian for goodness sake, and then easily throws a damn car at him! Spider-Man shouldn’t be so weak. Even teenage depictions of him. That’s why I think he should keep this level of strength for Homecoming. However, this also means his villains have to be stronger as well. I think the thugs with gravity weapons should actually lose a decent threat to this version of Peter still. After all, Eve with Spider-Sense, how do you dodge gravity? The Shocker definitely needs an upgrade. The alien tech in his gloves should pack a punch though. In this version, he should be able to crush cars and send them across parking lots with just a single punch. Vulture is already a great adversary for Peter. He’s able to force Peter into aerial combat, where Peter can’t swing around or be acrobatic effectively. His wings can cut through steel. His talons can restrain him. On top of his alien amped weaponry. Remember, Peter shouldn’t grown in power. He should grow INTO his power. He knows how to punch bad guys. But managing damage control, capturing enemies and putting them into the proper authorities, interrogating, and much more is a little bit more complicated.

Suit/Design:

Peter should have his Civil War Concept Suit. It’s simply superior to his Homecoming one. And I think that’s a fact. Also, Peter’s Stark Suit won’t have so much tech in it. This suit was whipped together for Peter by Tony on the fly. It wasn’t designed for Peter, it was designed for the vague idea of who Spider-Man is and what his abilities are. No drone, no parachute, no web wings, no thousands of web types, no AI, and definitely no kill mode. It’s just a Spidey suit made with extra expensive and quality materials, and maybe a GPS. Keep all the high tech stuff for the Iron-Spider suit. The high tech suit actually designed for Peter.

Story Changes:

Peter still looks up to Iron Man. But he’s not so sure of those other Avenger guys. Half of them are fugitives now. And Cap was kind of a dry biscuit. And that Black Panther guy was so busy talking about “revenge” and all that. Too bad he didn’t get to meet Thor, he probably would’ve been cool. He definitely still wants to be an Avenger, but not like those tools. When Peter and Randy are in gym and watching the Captain America PSA video, Peter makes fun of Cap more and says that he was a bit of a Boy Scout.

With his first encounter with the Vulture, apparently the suit has both a height limit and proximity limit that Tony installed to keep him in New York. When it activates, a parachute comes out and prevents him from pursuing the Vulture further. He’s upset at Mr. Stark as he knows he could have gotten him.

Randy helps Peter disable the suits proximity limit. Peter goes out across the city to New Jersey instead of Washington. The Decathlon is being held in NY. And it seems like the criminal group has a warehouse in Jersey. Instead of climbing the Washington Monument, he climbs the Empire State Building.

On the Faerie, Peter originally has it all under control. Until Federak Agents arrive. He struggles to hold the Faerie together, but eventually it seems like he’s actually pulling it together. However, Iron Man interrupts before Peter’s efforts can come to fruition. Peter learns that Tony called the agents and is furious. He could’ve handled it, but Tony got in the way. Tony still takes the suit. Peter still respects Tony, but he doesn’t think that he is the type of her he wants to be anymore.

Tony apologizes for not trusting Peter. Tony shows Peter the crowd waiting for his appearance. Peter declines the Iron-Spider suit (which is better designed). He doesn’t think it’s a trick. He has decided that this isn’t the type of hero he wants to be. Not the kind that recklessly decimate airports, and have petty squabbles. He’s gonna be the “Friendly Neighborhood Spider-Man”. And he’s gonna be both a hero and an Avenger his own way…

This is a continuation of my Godzilla 2014 Rewrite (Final Cut) as I go through the entire Monsterverse. However you DO NOT have to read my rewrite for that film (link is here: https://www.reddit.com/r/GODZILLA/s/GAMFHpaROi ) to get anything my out of this rewrite.

Alright, Kong: Skull Island. A genuinely good film. Probably the strongest movie in the Monsterverse. This rewrite won’t be too much like my others. Less scene-by-scene discussion like my others and more discussion of overall character arcs and creative decisions.

Characters:

The original movie doesn’t have a real protagonist. We focus on Conrad the most. But he’s not really a main character. He doesn’t have a real motivation or character arc. So instead we’re making this fully ensemble movie. No main character. Imo this works even more for the King Kong premise as it means that truly anyone can die.

Conrad is changed to have an actual personality. He’s hardened from the war. Over the course of the film he learns to open up and trust in others again. When Marlow tells the crew about him and Gunpei Ikari. This teaches him that maybe the world is more than just us and them. More than just the war. This parallels Packard who only goes deeper into his obsession in finding a war with Kong.

Weaver’s character is leaned more into a hippie-dippie peace no war type of character. With her being a war photographer and all. She clashes with other characters, mainly Packard. And helps influence Conrad’s character.

Bill Randa survives. He’s an important part of this universe that deserves to live. Also, it’s sometimes interesting to see the asshole who got everybody into the situation survive. It’s unfair. And sadly that’s sometimes how life is.

Also, Kong needs more actual things to fight on the island. Not just the Skull Crawlers. I’d say include the Warbat from GvK. I know that’s kinda cheating since Warbat hasn’t been created yet. But screw it.

Death:

People die in this movie. That’s one of the best parts about it. And this is an ensemble movie. And we’ll never really see these guys again. So let’s take advantage of that. Nearly everybody dies. Not just army guys. Actual unique characters. Similar to the Peter Jackson King Kong. This includes Conrad. He takes the place of the guy who gets tail slapped by the Skull Crawler into the mountain as he walks towards it with grenades.

The end credits of the movie is changed. We see Bill Randa setting up more of the foundations for the current modern day version of Monarch. He’s being funded much more now that the expedition has proven monsters exist. He receives some photos from some intel overseas. Another new anonymous organism. What they are now dubbing “Titans”. This one has been given the name “Titanus Gojira”…

(The Monsterverse Rewrite will continue with Godzilla: King of The Monsters.)

(Please let me hear your thoughts!)

Yesterday I posted a 2nd cut of my G14 Rewrite. And I got some earned criticism. So I’m back with a FINAL cut of the rewrite. Focusing on writing and character arcs and less on plot details. Sorry for the bother, I hope you enjoy.

So without further ado, let’s give this a final shot…

The nuclear reactor meltdown is NOT cause by the Muto. It is caused by Godzilla. In this rewrite Godzilla isn’t just a standard good guy or neutral good character. He’s a true neutral. He doesn’t necessarily desire to harm others, but he doesn’t care if he does. And because of that, the military will be combating him as well.

Ford Brody is still our protagonist. But we’re making him less of a living piece of cardboard. This version of him is angrier at his father. He has years of built up anger and rage from his father’s neglect after his mother’s death. Joe practically abandoned Ford. Now Ford is doing the best he can to be a good father to his own son Sam. But his career in the military keeps pulling him away. He feels like he’s failing. He doesn’t wanna be like his father. His wife Elle secretly hides it, but she wants him at home. She’s having trouble working and being a single parent.

We see Serizawa, the Director of Monarch, and Dr. Graham investigate a crumbled mine in the Philippines. There they find the skeletal remains of a massive creature.

Just as Ford finally gets to reunite with his family he’s pulled out again to bail out his father in Japan. He is fed up. He’s mad at himself for even coming out. He told himself that he wouldn’t let his father affect his life anymore. He’s even angrier that his father is still going down this path of crazy conspiracies. Ford bursts out. He’s nothing but a crazy old man. He ruined his own life and family. And now he’s just trying to do it again to his family. Joe tries to convince Ford that a monster was the cause of the reactor meltdown. Joe tries to get Ford to go with him. Ford agrees, but only if Joe promises him that he’ll never have to see him again.

They make their way to the closed off site in hazmat suits. The expedition starts to drag on with nothing of note coming up. Ford is getting fed up. He turns to go, he’s done wasting his time here. Joe calls out to him, asking him if he’s really gonna abandon his mother’s memory like this? Ford immediately turns around and is outraged, he starts to get physical with his father, pushing him onto the ground. But Joe suddenly tells him to stop. He pulls off his mask. Ford asks him what the hell he’s doing, showing that he still does truly care for his father. Joe shows that their equipment that the radiation levels are zero. Theirs no contamination.

Just as that happens, government vehicles pull up and surround them. They are handcuffed and pulled into a vehicle. Ford tells his father that he knew this was a bad idea, now they have broken federal law.

The two are locked up at the monarch facility. Joe yells at the people keeping them captive, giving his speech of “it’s gonna send us back to the Stone Age!”. Ford tells him to quiet down. Ford is conflicted, the zero contamination doesn’t make sense, but the idea of some creature taking down the plant still feels impossible.

The Muto is a Titan which has been sapping off the Radioactivity Godzilla left behind years ago.The Muto breaks out of its chrysalis and causes havoc. Both Joe and Ford escape. At another Monarch Facility, Serizawa explains everything. He is the Director of Monarch. Monsters are real. Their job is to make sure no one else knows that. And one did in fact cause the reactor meltdown that killed Sandra. It’s called “Godzilla”. It’s an ancient prehistoric beast. It feeds off radiation. The bikini atoll testing was an attempt at killing the creature. Although this only increased its power, as it feeds off radiation. Hence why it attacked the power plant. And why no nuclear energy was detected in the contaminated area. The two Brody’s are shown a picture of the creature. Only its dorsal plates shown while it swims through the water. Apparently that’s the only picture Monarch has of the organism currently. Both Ford and Joe want the damn thing dead. Ford apologizes to Joe. For everything. Joe accepts. Which just makes Ford feel worse.

The Muto starts heading towards Hawaii. The cat is out of the bag. The world now knows monsters exist. The American Military mobilizes. Ford and Joe go with Serizawa.

The Air Force tries to intercept the male Muto on its way to Hawaii. But their weapons are proven ineffective. The creature barrel rolls and takes out the planes in the area, killing its pilots.

The creature makes its way to Hawaii. But something is off. It can detect a greater presence. A massive tsunami comes toward the island as people run for their lives. Godzilla surfaces. Stomping his way toward where the Muto are making their nesting grounds. Both Ford and Joe are outraged to see the monster. The armed forces try their best to combat both Godzilla and the Muto. Godzilla engages and harms the male Muto. It flies away and retreats.

A larger female Muto has made its presence known in Las Vegas. Both Mutos are making their way to San Francisco.

The army wants to drop nukes down onto San Francisco. Both Serizawa and Joe try to convince the army general not to. But it’s too late, it’s already been dropped and has a set detonation.

We see the chaos in San Fran from Elle and Sam’s perspective as the army combats Godzilla as he arrives and we see the military combat him.

Ford joins up with the military force and goes in for a halo jump into the city to disarm the warhead. All the while Godzilla and the two Muto combat each other. Godzilla slams the male Muto into a skyscraper, killing him. Ford is able to locate and disarm the warhead. Godzilla then unleashes his Atomic Breath on the female, performing the Kiss of Death and killing her.

As the sunrise comes up into the sky, Godzilla parts into the sea. Ford stares him down as he walks away. He’ll never forgive the monster for what he’s done. But he the lesser amongst many evils. So he gets to live for now in his eyes.

We see Serizawa offer Joe a position by his side at Monarch. He accepts. Especially now that the existence of these monsters have gone public. We see Ford reunite with Elle and Sam. Joe comes as well. He gets to meet his daughter-in-law and grandson for the first time. Their family has been reunited.

As the film ends we see news reports and congress meetings go by as the existence of monsters and the Monarch organization have now gone public. Opinions and positions are varied. But one thing is sure, the world will never be the same.

(PLEASE, I would LOVE to hear your thoughts.)

(And stay tuned for more updates on my continuation of this film in further Monsterverse Rewrites

Next up is Kong: Skull Island…)

So, a few days ago I posted my rewrite for Godzilla 2014 and… it wasn’t received well…. So I took a lot of the criticism to try and make a second attempt. The feedback kinda made me realize I was changing the movie too much and forcing it into something it isn’t. So thank you for your feedback everybody!

So without further ado, let’s give this another shot…

The nuclear reactor meltdown is NOT cause by the Muto. It is caused by Godzilla. In this rewrite Godzilla isn’t just a standard good guy or neutral good character. He’s a true neutral. He doesn’t necessarily desire to harm others, but he doesn’t care if he does. And because of that, the military will be combating him as well.

Ford Brody is still our protagonist. But we’re making him less of a living piece of cardboard. This version of him is angrier at his father. He has years of built up anger and rage from his father’s neglect after his mother’s death. Joe practically abandoned Ford. Now Ford is doing the best he can to be a good father to his own son Sam. But his career in the military keeps pulling him away. He feels like he’s failing. He doesn’t wanna be like his father. His wife Elle secretly hides it, but she wants him at home. She’s having trouble working and being a single parent.

We see Serizawa, the Director of Monarch, and Dr. Graham investigate a crumbled mine in the Philippines. There they find the skeletal remains of a massive creature.

Just as Ford finally gets to reunite with his family he’s pulled out again to bail out his father in Japan. He is fed up. He’s mad at himself for even coming out. He told himself that he wouldn’t let his father affect his life anymore. He’s even angrier that his father is still going down this path of crazy conspiracies. Ford bursts out. He’s nothing but a crazy old man. He ruined his own life and family. And now he’s just trying to do it again to his family. Joe tries to convince Ford that a monster was the cause of the reactor meltdown. Joe tries to get Ford to go with him. Ford agrees, but only if Joe promises him that he’ll never have to see him again.

They make their way to the closed off site in hazmat suits. The expedition starts to drag on with nothing of note coming up. Ford is getting fed up. He turns to go, he’s done wasting his time here. Joe calls out to him, asking him if he’s really gonna abandon his mother’s memory like this? Ford immediately turns around and is outraged, he starts to get physical with his father, pushing him onto the ground. But Joe suddenly tells him to stop. He pulls off his mask. Ford asks him what the hell he’s doing, showing that he still does truly care for his father. Joe shows that their equipment that the radiation levels are zero. Theirs no contamination.

Just as that happens, government vehicles pull up and surround them. They are handcuffed and pulled into a vehicle. Ford tells his father that he knew this was a bad idea, now they have broken federal law.

The two are locked up at the monarch facility. Joe yells at the people keeping them captive, giving his speech of “it’s gonna send us back to the Stone Age!”. Ford tells him to quiet down. Ford is conflicted, the zero contamination doesn’t make sense, but the idea of some creature taking down the plant still feels impossible.

The Muto is a Titan which is sapping off the Radioactivity Godzilla left behind years ago. The Muto breaks out of its chrysalis and causes havoc. Both Joe and Ford escape. At another Monarch Facility, Serizawa explains everything. He is the Director of Monarch. Monsters are real. Their job is to make sure no one else knows that. They are called Titans. And one did in fact cause the reactor meltdown that killed Sandra. It’s called “Godzilla”. It was created from nuclear testing done by the Americans. Before that, it’s theorized it was a kind of undiscovered ancient type of marine reptile. It feeds of nuclear energy. Hence why it attacked the power plant. And why no nuclear energy was detected in the contaminated area. The two Brody’s are shown a picture of the creature. Only its dorsal plates shown while it swims through the water. Apparently that’s the only picture Monarch has of the organism. Both Ford and Joe want the damn thing dead. Ford apologizes to Joe. For everything. Joe accepts. Which just makes Ford feel worse.

The Muto starts heading towards Hawaii. The cat is out of the bag. The world now knows monsters exist. The American Military mobilizes. Ford and Joe go with Serizawa.

The Air Force tries to intercept the male Muto on its way to Hawaii. But their weapons are proven ineffective. The creature barrel rolls and takes out the planes in the area, killing its pilots.

The creature makes its way to Hawaii. But something is off. It can detect a greater presence. A massive tsunami comes toward the island as people run for their lives. Godzilla surfaces. Stomping his way toward where the Rodan are making their nesting grounds. Both Ford and Joe are outraged to see the monster. The armed forces try their best to combat both Godzilla and the Muto. Godzilla engages and harms the male Muto. It flies away and retreats.

A larger female Muto has made its presence known in Las Vegas. Both Mutos are making their way to San Francisco.

The army wants to drop nukes down onto San Francisco. Both Serizawa and Joe try to convince the army general not to. But it’s too late, it’s already been dropped and has a set detonation.

We see the chaos in San Fran from Elle and Sam’s perspective as the army combats Godzilla as he arrives and we see the military combat him.

Ford joins up with the military force and goes in for a halo jump into the city to disarm the warhead. All the while Godzilla and the two Muto combat each other. Godzilla slams the male Muto into a skyscraper, killing him. He the unleashes his Atomic Breath on the female, nearly killing her. Just as Ford gets to the warhead to disarm it, the female Muto gets to it. She takes the warhead to her mates carcass. A chrysalis grows around them.

Thinking the Muto may have been subdued, the army and air force open fire on Godzilla, temporarily distracting him from the chrysalis.

The chrysalis opens to reveal… Muto Prime! The two Mutos have fused into a larger more powerful form. It’s a hard fight, with Godzilla not looking to come out on top. But in the end he uses the kiss of death to defeat the Titan.

As the sunrise comes up into the sky, Godzilla parts into the sea. Ford stares him down as he walks away. He’ll never forgive the monster for what he’s done. But he the lesser amongst many evils. So he gets to live for now in his eyes.

We see Serizawa offer Joe a position by his side at Monarch. He accepts. Especially now that the existence of the Titans have gone public. We see Ford reunite with Elle and Sam. Joe comes as well. He gets to meet his daughter-in-law and grandson for the first time. Their family has been reunited.

As the film ends we see news reports and congress meetings go by as the existence of Titans and the Monarch organization have now gone public. Opinions and positions are varied. But one thing is sure, the world will never be the same.

(PLEASE, I would LOVE to hear your thoughts.)

(And stay tuned for more updates on my continuation of this film in further Monsterverse Rewrites)

So, Godzilla 2014. A pretty good film. Not great. But good. And in retrospect, I think there are ways to improve it. As well as changes that are more towards my personal liking.

A change I need to address first are the Mutos…. I’m removing them. WAIT! Before you have me burned at the stake let me explain. While I do like the Mutos, they are a part of a larger problem I personally have with the Monsterverse. The imbalance if Toho and original Kaiju. It’s an odd imbalance. I think Godzilla should stick to standard Toho monsters in this adaptation.

But we need something to fill their spot… so what could we use? How about Rodan. In the monsters original film there were two of them, a male and a female. The can fly. They were going to be apart of the monster era to begin with. And it adds color variation so there isn’t so much black in the film. Plus, when walking around like Pterodactyl’s with their wings folded they have a similar posture to the Muto’s!

Let’s talk about designs.

Godzilla. He’s perfect. Seriously, this is a beautiful Godzilla design. Some people don’t like the dorsal plates for the 2014 designs but I think they are cool and unique. Not every Godzilla design needs to have the same dorsal plates over and over again.

Rodan. I think this concept design by InkVeil-Matter really fits right into the tone of the G14 film.

The nuclear reactor meltdown is NOT cause by the Muto. It is caused by Godzilla. In this rewrite Godzilla isn’t just a standard good guy or neutral good character. He’s a true neutral. He doesn’t necessarily desire to harm others, but he doesn’t care if he does.

Ford Brody is still our protagonist. But we’re making him less of a living piece of cardboard. This version of him is angrier at his father. He has years of built up anger and rage from his father’s neglect after his mother’s death. Joe practically abandoned Ford. Now Ford is doing the best he can to be a good father to his own son Sam. But his career in the military keeps pulling him away. He feels like he’s failing. He doesn’t wanna be like his father. His wife Elle secretly hides it, but she wants him at home. She’s having trouble working and being a single parent.

This version of Ford doesn’t exactly match with Aaron Taylor Johnson as a casting. Plus, in just a year’s time in 2015 him and Elizabeth Olsen will play siblings in Avengers: Age of Ultron. So I’m going to recast him. We need someone in their lat 20’s-early 30’s. Can pass for military. And needs to be able to let out loud bursts of emotion. I’m choosing Andrew Garfield. He was 31 in 2014. He can reasonably pass for military. He’s a big enough actor coming off The Amazing Spider-Man so he might be chosen for star power as well. And he’s able to bring out those loud emotional moments.

Just as Ford finally gets to reunite with his family he’s pulled out again to bail out his father in Japan. He is fed up. He’s mad at himself for even coming out. He told himself that he wouldn’t let his father affect his life anymore. He’s even angrier that his father is still going down this path of crazy conspiracies. Ford bursts out. He’s nothing but a crazy old man. He ruined his own life and family. And now he’s just trying to do it again to his family. Joe tries to convince Ford that a monster was the cause of the reactor meltdown. Joe tries to get Ford to go with him. Ford agrees, but only if Joe promises him that he’ll never have to see him again.

They make their way to the closed off site in hazmat suits. The expedition starts to drag on with nothing of note coming up. Ford is getting fed up. He turns to go, he’s done wasting his time here. Joe calls out to him, asking him if he’s really gonna abandon his mother’s memory like this? Ford immediately turns around and is outraged, he starts to get physical with his father, pushing him onto the ground. But Joe suddenly tells him to stop. He pulls off his mask. Ford asks him what the hell he’s doing, showing that he still does truly care for his father. Joe shows that their equipment that the radiation levels are zero. Theirs no contamination.

Just as that happens, government vehicles pull up and surround them. They are handcuffed and pulled into a vehicle. Ford tells his father that he knew this was a bad idea, now they have broken federal law. The man in the passenger seat, Dr. Ishiro Serizawa, gets a phone call. Apprently something is happening at Outpost 56. They don’t have time to stop anywhere. They’ll have to drop the two off at the outpost when they get there.

They make landfall on Isla de Mara off the coast of Mexico. The two are locked up at Outpost 54. Joe yells at the people keeping them hostage, giving his speech of “it’s gonna send us back to the Stone Age!”. Ford tells him to quiet down. They’re in snapshot trouble as is. Meanwhile Dr. Serizawa, the director of Monarch is being informed of what’s happening at the outpost. Apparently the “subject” is having an increase in radiation levels. The “subject” breaks out. A massive reddish brown pterodactyl like creature. It bursts out of the volcano and facility on top of it. It flies straight into the sky. There has been a breach. While commotion occurs, Joe and Ford break out. They run into Serizawa. They feel a rumble in the ground. A second pterodactyl creature, larger than the first, a male, breaks out of the volcano, this time crumbling the mountain side. The scientists only detected one subject in the mountain, they didn’t think there were two. It thrashes around, destroying the facility and killing many personnel.

At another Monarch Facility, Serizawa explains everything. He is the Director of Monarch. Monsters are real. Their job is to make sure no one else k owns that. They are called Kaiju. And one did in fact cause the reactor meltdown that killed Sandra. It’s called “Godzilla”. It was created from nuclear testing done by the Americans. Before that, it’s theorized it was a kind of undiscovered ancient type of marine reptile. It feeds of nuclear energy. Hence why it attacked the power plant. And why no nuclear energy was detected in the contaminated area. The two Brody’s are shown a picture of the creature. Only its dorsal plates shown while it swims through the water. Apparently that’s the only picture Monarch has of the organism. Both Ford and Joe want the damn thing dead. Ford apologizes to Joe. For everything. Joe accepts. Which just makes Ford feel worse.

The two Rodan make their way to Hawaii. The nearest suitable nesting ground. The cat is out of the bag. The world now knows monsters exist. The American Military mobilizes. Ford and Joe go with Serizawa.

The Air Force tries to intercept the smaller female on its way to Hawaii. But their weapons are proven ineffective. The creature barrel rolls and takes out the planes in the area, killing its pilots.

The two creatures make it to Hawaii. But something is off. They both can detect a greater presence. A massive tsunami comes toward the island as people run for their lives. Godzilla surfaces. Stomping his way toward where the Rodan are making their nesting grounds. Both Ford and Joe are outraged to see the monster.

As Godzilla makes its way to where the male Rodan is making the nesting grounds, the female comes out to combat Godzilla. In this section we get full on monster brawling. No interruptions. Not testing. Godzilla tosses the female aside as it is defeated. The two winged Kaiju retreat, heading toward the nearest piece of land…. San Francisco.

Ford joins up with the military. While Joe sticks with Serizawa. This is the climax of the movie. We see Elle and Sam trying to make their way out of the city as both Godzilla and the Rodan make landfall. The military drops from the sky into the city.

The military is planning on dropping a bomb onto San Francisco. Both Serizawa and Ford have to meet up with the military higher ups to convince them not to. As it will just increase the Kaiju’s power. All the while Godzilla combats the two Rodan. Here, we get another awesome monster fight set piece and the climax of the movie. We see the fight from Fords perspective. Joe and Serizawa convince the military higher ups not to drop the bomb. When asked how to resolve this problem then, Serizawa simply replies “let them fight”. Near the ends Godzilla finally unleashes his Atomic Breath. Godzilla takes down the female first, using his tail to splatter her against a building. He then finishes off the male with the Kiss of Death, tossing the males head aside into the ocean.

As the sunrise comes up into the sky, Godzilla parts into the sea. Ford stares him down as he walks away. He’ll never forgive the monster for what he’s done. But he the lesser amongst many evils. So he gets to live for now in his eyes.

We see Serizawa offer Joe a position by his side at Monarch. He accepts. Especially now that the existence of the Kaiju have gone public. We see Ford reunite with Elle and Sam. Joe comes as well. He gets to meet his daughter-in-law and grandson for the first time. Their family has been reunited.

As the film ends we see news reports and congress meetings go by as the existence of Kaiju and the Monarch organization have now gone public. Opinions and positions are varied. But one thing is sure, the world will never be the same.

(PLEASE, I would LOVE to hear your thoughts.)

(And stay tuned for more updates on my continuation of this film in further Monsterverse Rewrites)

TASM Rewrite

Okay, I want start this off by saying TASM is genuinely my favorite Spider-Man movie. It’s not the best, though it’s not the worst. However this movie does have very noticeable flaws. Many which sadly come from deleted scenes.

So, the goal of this rewrite is to:

-expand on The Lizard’s character

-create a more obvious theming of fatherhood within the movie

-fix slight pacing issues

-reintroduce/introduce Martha and Billy Connors as characters

-slow down Peter and Gwen’s romantic growth

-give redesigns to Peter’s suit and the Lizard

-introduce more sunset and day scenes

-Make The Lizards motivation more animalistic and get rid of the stupid “turn people into lizards” plotline

I also want to premise, I LOVE the TASM suit. However, the problem with it is that it’s not received well. And I want to piggyback off this with a TASM 2 rewrite. So unless I want the TASM suit to be replaced I need to make a few changes. I simply added white lenses, made the rims black, got rid of blue patterns on the hands and arms, remove red on thighs, and added a belt section, reduce the length of the legs in the logo and connected the logos segmented bits, and add a new back logo slightly different from the front. As well as making the suit made of more standard spandex materials. With the Lizard…. yeah we need a few changes. Mainly just giving the guy a snout. I was debating leaving out the purple pants, but I thought it would be a fun bit to have Connor’s liking to wear purple pants, and others teasing him for it. I think it also gives him a bit more humanity in his character, a little less of a super serious scientist with no real personality.

As for music, we can keep it mostly the same. However let’s also include the TASM2 main theme for Peter’s more heroic moments towards the middle and end of the movie. By doing this we can set this then as Spidey’s theme throughout the TASM movies.

Also, let’s keep Peters hair down. For 3/4 of the movie Peter wears his hair down. And it looks way better. It makes him look younger, and more like Peter Parker. So yeah, executive decision there. Also we’re keeping how Peter has an NY accent. It’s a great touch that no other Spider-Man has done.

As we open the film we keep the scene with Richard and Mary Parker. But theirs no secret science bits. Richard has no involvement with the spiders. He’s just an Oscorp Geneticist. Richard and Mary say goodbye. Mary doesn’t cry. They aren’t hiding, this is just a regular business trip. She is soft spoken with Peter and reminds May about his night light and tells him to make sure to brush his teeth. Richard is colder in his sentiment. But he very much still cares. He utters “be good”.

We transition into Peter in Highschool. He’s 17 years old, at the start of his Senior Year. He’s overlooked at school. We see the same scene of him getting approached by a girl just to be asked about getting a club photo taken, him struggling to get into his locker as a couple is making out. (Peter doesn’t skateboard. (Not because it’s “too cool” Peter has always been a cool jerky nerd. It just doesn’t add to much to the character and we don’t need him to skateboard to let us know that he’s not a total loser). Peter defends the kid getting picked on by Flash. Flash gets in Peter’s face and tries to start a fight. But Gwen comes in and tells Flash to back off. It’s not as snarky and witty as the original. More of just a quick matter of fact thing telling him to back off. Flash throws Peter’s camera on the ground when leaving. As Peter is picking his camera up while everyone else walks away Gwen lingers for a moment but hesitates and ends up walking away. Later after class Gwen asks Peter what his name is. Peter is nervous and fumbles through a response. Gene laughs. She tells him that she’ll see him around. Peter leaves school smiling with a pip in his step.

At home we get to see the Parker household. (Ben and May in this film are both great. They feel like real people. Ben is a good but flawed everyday working man. Not some saint or angel. He’s someone you can see an actual father figure in. He’s not perfect but he always tries to do the right thing).Peter is much more confident and jokes around when around Aunt May and Uncle Ben. Peter helps Ben get boxes from the flooded basement. Ben sees Peter’s smile. He asks him if it’s a girl. Peter dodges the question. Ben says that he was a kid once too. He can’t tell just by that look on his face. He asks who the girl is. Peter laughs and insists that it’s just a girl he said hi to in class. After Ben leaves, he finds his father’s briefcase.He brings it up and May and Ben are shoved. Peter brings it to his room. In it he finds his father’s glasses, unfinished formulas for some sort of project about a solvent possibly used for construction. And a bunch of files for a project his father worked on with a mysterious Dr. Kurt Connors. He does research on his computer and finds that the man works at Oscorp. Peter asks Ben and May if they knew about this man. They say that they met the man a few times. They mention that the only thing they have been keeping up with Oscorp after his parents… left them was that Osborne boy that moved away a few years ago. Him and Peter had been close growing up.

The next day after school Peter visits Oscorp. He steals a student visitor pass and laughs as the person who he stole the pass of is dragged out. It’s clear Peter is a pretty flawed character. Peter goes along with the tour and tries to hide from Gwen who’s leading the tour. Connors presents their research on cellular regeneration. Although he outs himself when he answers a question from Dr. Connor’s which impresses him. During the tour Connors also introduces his Wife Martha who also works in the lab. Peter goes off before Gene can confront him. He goes into a room behind the lab that’s seemingly accidentally been unlocked. In the room isn’t a wall of spiders but rather a few specimens being studied. Peter looks at the specimens. Gwen comes into the room and Peter is startled. When he is startled he numbs into a console, releasing the spider he was just looking at. It crawls into his sleeve. Gwen takes his pass. Peter is disappointed. He thinks he blew his chances with talking to Gwen again. While leaving the spider bites his hand. He winces and swipes it away.

Peter comes home late, missing dinner. He’s sweating and a mess. He catches a fly mid-air. He rummages the fridge then heads upstairs. May is surprised that Peter took her meatloaf, he hates her meatloaf. Ben says that everybody hates her meatloaf. She doesn’t like that answer.

Peter wakes up the morning to find things have changed. Well, he has changed. He breaks his alarm clock. He rips things off the wall with his fingers sticking to them, his toothpaste shoots across the room. He dodges school. He looks down to see the spider bite. He researches spider bites and their effects, trying to find anything that could have done this. Although he doesn’t get far. As all the keys on his key board stick to his finger. He goes out and tests his new abilities. Swinging around on chains, sticking to wall, and jumping all around. Peter is having a blast.

At the same time we see Connor’s at his house. It’s his son Billy’s birthday. We see him and Martha happy for their son at the celebration. After the celebration Connor’s and Billy play catch with his new baseball glove he got. Connor’s fumbles while using one hand. Billy insists that it’s okay. He continues to struggle and Billy says that it’s fine once again Connor’s keeps insisting and even raises his voice at him. Connor’s seems to realize he’s making Billy upset and retreats into his study.

Later that night at the Connor’s house, a bell is rung at the door. Peter Parker is standing there awkwardly. Martha questions who he is. He tells her that he is Richard Parker’s son. She welcomes him in. Connor’s is shocked to see Peter. Last time he saw him he was a little boy. Peter also brought his fathers briefcase. In it Connor’s finds a missing equation that could possibly help his current problem with his regeneration project. However it still needs some work. Connor’s tells Peter to come by Oscorp tommorow night.

The next day Peter gets pushed around by Flash in the gym. Peter pushes back and makes a fool out of flash. He breaks the backboard. Peter is picked up by Uncle Ben. He bumps into Gwen. Gwen asks why he was at Oscorp and he tells her that Connor’s and his father were colleagues. And he’s trying to learn more about his father. While walking away Ben asks Peter if that’s the girl that’s got him so happy lately. Peter denies it. Ben can tell that he’s lying though. He messes with Peter by joking to Gwen that he’s Peter’s patrol officer.

Later that night, Connor’s and Peter are working at Oscorp. While working, Kurt tells Peter about how brilliant his father was and how Peter reminds him of him (paralleling Uncle Ben’s speech). Peter gets a call from. Kurt I issits he picks it up but Peter says it’s fine. Peter corrects something in an equation. And Connor’s believe they have finally cracked it.

Peter returns home. Ben yells at Peter for forgetting about May and his neglect. They fight. At the end of Ben’s speech he adds on “With Great Power comes Great Responsibility”. Peter alas the door and runs off.

As he’s roaming around he sees a convenience store getting robbed. He thinks about stopping in to help, knowing that with his newfound abilities he probably could do something. But he decides not to. Uncle Ben tries to find Peter. The man from the robbery runs into Ben. He’s erratic. Ben tries to talk him down but the ma has had enough and shoots Ben. Peter finds Ben bleeding out. Later that night, Peter and May grieve and cry in the house while the police talk to him. Peter sees the sketch of Ben’s attacker and realizes it’s the same man.

The next day Flash gets Peter’s attention. Peter slams Flash against the locker. Flash says he’s sorry about what happened. Gwen comforts Peter.

At night while Peter is sulking in his room he looks at the sketch of the man. This is all his fault. He goes out wearing a red mask and glasses. Hunting down Ben’s killer. It’s his “responsibility” to do so. Peter uses the experimental solvent formula from his father’s briefcase to create webfluid (like in the Ultimate comics). And he creates his webshooters (they don’t have there’s flashing, this is another aspect that only really works in night shots). Peter flips from a building, holding himself up using two fingers, anxiously testing his new inventions. It’s a success. We see Peter put together his costume. We see a POV shot of Peter crawling around and swinging onto a building. We see the full suit for the first time in the reflection.

“Spider-Man” has become quite the celebrity. Peter is surprised by the name. But he’s not against it. We see Peter hunt down criminals matching the man’s description, getting the way of the NYPD and Captain Stacy. Flash Thompson in particular is a loud advocate for the vigilante.

May is worried about Peter. She confronts him when he comes home late at night. She yells at him and forces him to take his hood off. She questions what’s wrong with him. What is he doing? Is he getting into fights? Doing drugs? Crime? She doesn’t get answers.

Captain Stacy of the NYPD officially announces that a warrant for Spider-Man’s arrest has been issued with a high reward.

At Oscorp the higher ups, mainly Miles Warren congratulate Kurt on his advancement on the project. Connor’s wants to immediately start human trials. But Warren says no and that they need to wait for further testing.

At school, Gwen invites Peter over to her house for dinner. It’s awkward, but it’s cute.

Connor’s rests in his study of his home. Staring at the formula. He can’t wait any longer. He injects himself before passing out. Kurt wakes up to see his hand cased inside of a cocoon. He tears it open and is rejoiced to see his arm regenerated. He is overjoyed. But… something is off. He hunches over in pain. We see scales grow on his arms and face. We zoom in to see Kurt open his eyes, they are bright yellow with reptilian slits. Martha hears a noise downstairs late at night. She calls out for Kurt… no reply. A giant lizard bursts from Kurt’s study. Martha flees. The horrific reptiles breaks through the wall of the house seemingly taking things from Kurt’s study along with it… Later in the sewers we see Kurt in his Lizard from howling in pain and clutching his head.

Peter sneaks into Gwen’s room. Gwen is clearly a little offset by this. Dinner proceeds. Peter feels underdressed. Gwen is an only child. Gwen’s mother asks Captain Stacy if they have caught the “Spider-Man” yet. He bashes Spider-Man. Peter tries to defend himself without revealing who he is. But Captain Stacy makes a good point. He’s reckless. He gets in the way. Maybe he’s right. Outside, Peter reveals to Gwen that he is Spider-Man. (Now we can have the two have their full chemistry going on).

Peter is leaving Gwen’s house. He hears a commotion on the bridge.He changes into his suit and has a short fight with The Lizard. He chooses to save the young boy calling for help instead of chasing the monster. Peter saves the boy. The boys father asks him who he is. Peter replies “I’m Spider-Man”. Now embracing his role as a hero. And understanding his responsibility into to take vengeance. But to protect others.

Peter goes to Connor’s house. If anyone knows anything about that giant Lizard thing it would be him. But instead of finding help, he find a crime scene. Martha claims that a giant reptilian monster kidnapped Kurt and took his equipment. Peter sees Billy sitting in a room scared. Just like he was when he learned of his parent’s death. Just like he was recently with Aunt May after Ben’s death. He needs to find and save Connor’s. And take that Lizard monster down.

At school on the bleachers, Gwen and Peter talk. Gwen tells Peter that he doesn’t have to dk this. That this isn’t his job. But Peter insists that maybe it is. Because he thinks he is the only person that can do this. The two try to find out where the thing could be hiding. After all, how does a 7 foot tall Lizard man hide in one of the most populated cities in the world. They both deduce that Lizards instinctually seek out damp and dark places. The sewers. Peter catches a football and throws it back, denting the goal post. The two run off before they can get in trouble.

Peter also sees an internet advertisement by the Daily Bugle for pictures or evidence of “The Lizard”. Peter goes into the Bugles building to ask about the prize for the submission. With Uncle Ben gone, him and Aunt May are struggling with the bills. He runs into J Jonah Jameson. Played by Ice Cube (trust me just watch 22 Jump Street). Peter is told to get the hell out of his office.

Later, Peter delves into the sewers. He sets a web up to try and sense movement of the mister through vibrations. He also sets up a camera to try and get a photo for the Bugle submission and prize. In the meantime, he plays on his phone. He senses movement, but it’s a trick. His Spider Sense notifies him just in time before the Lizard leaps onto where he just was for a surprise attack. Peter battles the monster. When he is pinned by The Lizard his mask is ripped off. The creature revolts as a flash of humanity returns to its eyes. A crude “Parker…” comes out Kurt’s reptilian lips. He clutches his head in pain and carries off. Peter can’t believe it. The monster is Kurt. He also realizes he can’t turn in any of the photos he took with his camera. He doesn’t want any of this to somehow be connected to the Connor’s. Dammit.

Peter makes his way to Gwen’s and sneaks in to her bedroom. Gwen helps patch him up. He explains to her what happened and that Dr. Connor’s has somehow turned himself into The Lizard. Gwen is shocked.

We see Kurt in the sewers. Machines are sporadically and clumsily set up in a makeshift lab. He’s also wearing torn up lab coat and purple pants. It seems Connor’s might be gaining some of his intelligence back, but he’s clearly still driven by animalistic instinct. In his reptilian brain, he deduces that Spider-Man is his greatest threat. And Spider-Man is Peter Parker…

The next day at school, Kurt Connors bursts through the school bathroom stall and attacks the school. Peter changes into his suit to combat Connors. As the crowd of students is running away Flash Thompson cheers Spider-Man on. Peter combats the Lizard throughout the school. He tries to get through to Kurt. But it doesn’t work. While in the school lab, Connors mixes chemicals together in a flask in order to create a chemical explosion to throw at Peter. Peter realizes this means that some eminent of the brilliant man he once knew is still in there. But it seems he’s being driven by animalistic instinct. Connor’s successfully retreats and gets away.

Peter goes to the police station. He tries to convince Captain Stacy of what’s happened to Dr. Connor’s. But obviously he doesn’t believe Peter. It’s a ridiculous idea. And he’s infuriated that he would say such a thing about missing man who happened to be his daughter’s mentor. Peter is kicked out of the station.

Gwen and Peter make their way to the Connor’s house. They explain everything to Martha. Including the fact that Peter is Spider-Man. Martha deduces that they can start to create a cure using the leftovers of the syrup submitted for testing at Oscorp.

While Martha and Gwen make their way to Oscorp to synthesize a cure, Peter goes out to track down Connor’s and prevent him from hurting anyone else. However on the news it’s shown that Connor’s is making his way to Oscorp. He must be trying to find somewhere familiar.

Peter rushes to try and reach Martha and Gwen. But while doing so he is cornered by the NYPD. He is forced to take off his mask. Only Stacy gets a good look. Peter begs for him to let him go. When he tells Stacy that Gwen is in danger Stacy puts his trust in him and tells his men to stand down. Peter swings away, but an officer shoots him in the leg.

At Oscorp, Martha and Gwen are hiding from The Lizard while the cure synthesizes. He catches them and gets ready to claw at them but Peter comes in just in time to combat Connor’s. The Lizard throws Peter out of the building and their fight continues on the side of Oscorp tower. The NYPD makes it to where Gwen and Martha are right after. Martha and Gwen explain everything. He trusts them. The cure finishes synthesizing. Captain Stacy takes the cure and makes his way to the roof. Peter and The Lizard continue to clash. It’s a close and bloody fight. Stacy comes in, shooting Connor’s. But it has little effect. Stacy tries to distract him while Peter injects him with the cure. The plan has little success. Peter tries to grab Connor’s by the tail, but his tail poos off and then immediately regenerates. Stacy uses a disconnected tube of nitrogen to freeze and break off The Lizards hand, but it just regenerates seconds later. The Lizard stabs Stacy through the chest with his claws. He starts to bleed out. Connor’s starts to choke Peter with his tail while he growls ominously, his jaw opens wide. He lunges preparing to bite Peter’s head clean off. But just in time Martha shouts at him. She begs him to remember. Her. Their marriage. Their work together. Their beautiful baby boy. What a kind person he is. His desire to help everyone around him. The seems to lodge something in Connor’s brain as he clutches his head in pain. This gives Spider-Man the opportunity to inject Connor’s with the cure. Connor’s body starts to mutate back into his human form. Peter runs to Captain Stacy. He tells Peter to keep Gwen out of this. He passes away. Martha cries and holds Connor’s in her arms. Peter tells him that they need to get him home. Billy needs his father.

We see Peter and Gwen together at her father’s funeral. It seems Peter hasn’t kept his promise to Captain Stacy as the two remain close and now dating. The movie ends with Peter swinging the tough the city. With the iconic shot of him acrobatically maneuvering through the alleyway before swinging and posing towards the camera (in this version during the sunrise).