u/lapshablabla

Psychological Satire, 11 pages

I am going to rewrite the script to make the main topic more specific and clear, showing it in more interesting way. It’s difficult for me to understand what the purpose of the story looks like for the audience now, so I need your opinion:

What, as you think, ist this story about? What can you tell about characters? What would make the story more clear and interesting?

https://drive.google.com/file/d/1dPf1iushsrYlA5gUx41qEck6OXcuAvwk/view?usp=drivesdk

I appreciate your time and attention, thank you in advance!

Even though I've been writing for quite a while, I was always dissatisfied with all my work halfway through and abandoned it. So, I decided to write something short and simple (although this task is even more difficult than writing something complex). So now I really need feedbacks to get motivated to write and edit further. Be as critical as you want. Format, plot, language, characters and so on, everything what comes to your mind tell me. I‘ll be really thankful for your time, attention and knowledge sharing!

https://drive.google.com/file/d/1dPf1iushsrYlA5gUx41qEck6OXcuAvwk/view?usp=drivesdk

Title: An Article About the Great Present

Pages: 11

Genre: Psychological Satire

Logline: A middle-aged man goes to an interview at a local newspaper to fulfill his youthful dream of becoming a journalist, but encounters injustice.

Is that a strong tool or a harmful one? Of course, any technique can be executed well or poorly, but speaking more broadly: if the internal and external conflicts aren’t just connected but actually grow out of one another, does that make a story feel flat and one-dimensional, or does it make it more cohesive and focused on what really matters?

I am writing my first serialised screenplay. So basically each episode needs to be structured according to a standard act-based narrative, AND the entire season must possess an overarching structural framework. However, I am struggling to figure out how to take the structural model I am accustomed to — the kind I’ve learned to condense into a single, self-contained unit — and effectively distribute it across four or five separate episodes. If anyone has experience with this, please share your insights on how to organize it