u/jackomaster111

Hey everyone,

I just finished my first draft of this sitcom pilot I'm working on for fun. It is set in a comedy club in rural Ireland. I think it's overbloated. Most half-hour comedies are 30-35 pages, but my first draft landed at around 40. It's a good problem to have, I know. I'm just not sure what to cut out. They say "kill your babies," but I'm not sure which baby to kill.

I would appreciate some feedback on the whole thing, if you laughed or hated it etc.

https://drive.google.com/file/d/1B1xJP_TfSSfmvsy-sU2bdQqc5EXm-LRY/view?usp=sharing