u/albertpro1001

Hey everyone. I’ve been working on a short film set in a hospital waiting room. It follows two strangers waiting on loved ones after the same accident, as their conversation drifts into questions of guilt, chance, and meaning.

Title: Waiting Room

Format: Short Film

Page Length: 15 Pages

Genre: Existential Drama

Logline: When a random accident throws two strangers together in a hospital waiting room, their desperate search for meaning becomes the only thing keeping them sane.

Feedback Concerns:

• Does the dialogue feel real or does it feel written?
• Does the ending earn itself or does it feel too neat?
• Does the visual world of the film come through on the page.

Link: https://drive.google.com/file/d/1Fned6jKrSJplzslleeyj6icUp4x-cCpv/view?usp=sharing

Happy to return feedback on your work.