Feedback for: Lost Mothers and Other Reflections (Weird Dark Fantasy 2721 words)
Second attempt at this. The Google doc link in the last one had issues.
I've written a Dark / Weird Literary Fantasy novel that gets progressively stranger as you go through it.
I'd like to start it off with what seems to be a pretty standard and engaging fantasy opening and I'm curious how well that's working.
In this section there is slavery, street fights, drinking, murder, eating humans, an explanation of industrial regulatory capture, and a description of the process of making cheese. If any of those disturb you I'd skip.
The feedback I'm looking for specifically is:
Did this keep your interest or did you stop reading it? If so why?
Are the fictional terms introduced well and clear with what the mean? Examples: Uncuthwyrm, Hearthwyrm, etc
What is your reaction to Thiss as the main POV for the first section of the book?
What is your impression of Mushlick?
Is there anything that is confusing about the descriptions, the action, or where the characters are?