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Hey everyone. I recently got feedback from judges and they invited me to resubmit a polished version before final judging.

They said the language and formatting still need polishing.

Please be brutally honest but constructive. I’d rather hear real criticism than fake praise.

Title : The One In The Yard

Format : Short script

Pages : 6

Genre : horror

Logline : After his young son becomes obsessed with terrifying drawings of a strange presence lurking in their yard, a grieving father dismisses the warnings, until he realizes too late that the ancient tree outside their home may be calling the boy to something monstrous.

Feedback concern : awkward dialogue and grammar/formatting polish

https://drive.google.com/file/d/1Al52F8bmPX3UuZcn-CLG3c7gNE3HPvQH/view?usp=drivesdk

I currently use no-copyright music. The tracks are pretty good, but the problem is that some creators let people use their music and then later claim revenue from the videos. They can easily revoke permission at any time, so it’s very risky. I heard many people say that the YouTube Audio Library is completely free and has no risk, but I can’t find any good music there. Every track in the library sounds bad. They’re even worse than AI-generated music. I really don’t know what to do.