https://drive.google.com/file/d/1b0etb1VuNlRt6sHe\_8lTjeXRFrRHHkm6/view?usp=drivesdk
Title: weekend with Bernie
Format: Short
Pages: 6
Logline: looking for a friend, a lonely man literally runs into a stranger and takes him around town as his friend.
Looking for any/all feedback
Edit: I'm filming this myself for a class audio project
Hi! I'm shooting a short for a class and would like some feedback on my script!
It's essentially Weekend at Bernie's
Damian Mc Carthy is the master of single-location horror
Ignore the branding, I ripped this from YouTube. All the music was composed by myself using Reaper and my Kontakt plugins
Hi, this is an original pilot I want to submit to a mentorship competition. I'd love any sort of feedback, whether you read the first page, first ten pages, or the whole thing!
It's a sitcom that follows the day-to-day life of the employees of a Shawarma shop.
After the cold open, I've included lyrics to a parody of "My Sharona" entitled "My Shawarma" I'll probably be removing that before I submit, but I thought it'd be fun to include it here.
Are there any major issues you see? Is it funny? Any and all comments are welcome. Thanks!