Reading Mortis, it feels like it was written by a sophmore
I'm just slogging through it, and it repeatedly feels like it was written by someone who doesn't know how to use sentence structure, punctuation, or connecting words.
Look at this excerpt:
"The mountain came up to meet him. He landed in a tuck. Stone and ice exploded out. He rose, sword in hand. A stream of heavy rounds hit the warrior that landed beside him, but Corswain was already bounding up the frozen slope. He could see the gun-box above him, set into a crag of rocks. Autocannon barrels jutted from a half-sphere of plasteel. He leapt. The gun barrels swung down. Laser rangefinders touched his armour. He caught the rockcrete edge under the gun mount and sliced up with his sword. Lightning-wrapped steel sliced through the gun as it fired. Corswain caught the momentum of his cut and swung up. The dead guns swung side to side like the head of a blind man. He rammed the sword down. The point went through the gun fitting with an explosion of metal fragments. He sawed it sideways. He could hear the spluttering buzz of the servitor wired into the gun controls. Then his blade cut through the ammo feed. The explosion blew the gun out of its mount, and sent it tumbling down the mountainside. Above him, the domed cap of the mountain rose up and up."
If this was a movie it would be Taken 3, when they use 14 cuts to show someone jumping over a fence.
At this point I'm not reading it for pleasure, I'm hate-reading it just to get to the next book.