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I got feedback. I would like some more with some praise!
Title: The Driver
Format: Feature Film / Drama Thriller
Page Length: ~23 pages currently
Genres: Drama, Psychological Drama, Medical Drama? Thriller
Logline or Summary: After collapsing while operating a Tokyo metro train in 1999, a dedicated train driver discovers he has terminal cancer and struggles to confront life beyond the rigid routine that defines him.
Feedback Concerns:
- Pacing and escalation
- Character depth
- Emotional impact
- Tone consistency
google drive: https://drive.google.com/file/d/150TRwveLXNUp1fkwtQ0WaVbIpBjKyXU1/view?usp=sharing
u/MelodicBodybuilder10 — 5 hours ago