[QCrit] TITLE, Adult Fantasy (120k, 1st attempt)
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An immortal prince. A mortal woman. Bound by a massacre she was too young to remember—and hunted by family that wants them both dead.
After centuries of indulgence, a gnawing emptiness drives Prince Loros Revella home in search of purpose. He serves on Windhaven’s council, where he finds peace and unexpected love. But when his exiled uncle returns claiming redemption, the reunion ends in a massacre. After a dagger between his ribs, Loros escapes with his infant niece, an heir with a rare bloodline power—and the true reason for his uncle’s return. To keep her hidden, Loros gives up his immortality, his name, and the woman he loves.
Violet is a widow trying to rebuild her life: a young daughter, a flower shop, and sparring to manage her grief. But as women her age begin turning up dead and her father grows increasingly secretive, her world fractures. When the same man behind Loros’s massacre invades her isle, Violet learns she’s being hunted for a power she doesn’t know she has—and it’s not the first time he’s come for her. Twenty-nine years earlier, Violet was the heir Loros saved, and her father has always known, because he is Loros himself.
Violet’s daughter is taken. Loros is left for dead. If Violet dies, her child’s power will awaken. Driven by maternal fury, she must master the magic buried inside her before her child becomes the weapon her uncle has spent centuries waiting to control.
[TITLE] is a 120,000-word adult fantasy with series potential, told in dual first-person POVs that converge through a timeline-and-identity twist. It will appeal to readers of The Jasad Heir by Sara Hashem for its hidden magic, romantic subplot, and questions of identity, The Witch’s Heart by Genevieve Gornichec for its gut-wrenching sacrifices, and to anyone who loves a quiet burn that turns on its head.
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