u/Impossibledabmaster

So I am trying to learn editing on mobile and the software I use is alight motion and this is the first ever edit I made on alight motion. But this is a recreation of another edit made by @panic4386 which i really liked so I tried to recreate it but it didn't turn out the way his original edit is so here is the link to my edit-https://youtube.com/shorts/Naa2iQsq-Js?si=1vJkabnF1Grjw9il

So could you guys give me any and I mean any kind of feedback and tell me my weak points and strong points judging from this edit. Also here is the link to the original edit for comparison-https://youtu.be/CiSWeJAwnkI?si=utmfgWe1K5aUJeYX.