Every time I write a story for school assessments, I always get the same mark of 60%, and I'm always so confused. No matter how much effort I put in, it's always the same mark, so I feel like there might be some big problem with my writing, and I would love if someone could give me some advice on my last test since I didn't get much feedback from the marker. Also, it might be a bit messy because I wanted to copy the authentic writing from actual exam conditions. We got 35 mins to write it
Link: https://docs.google.com/document/d/1LJbZghl-pxkiTZv_EMrntiPdCSp6-97ClDHPDHYYYVI/edit?usp=sharing
I would really love it if someone could give me some critique and advice on how to write, so I can hopefully get better because I really enjoy the subject.