u/HealthSpecific3095

"So. The Guild has you assigned to me today, huh?"

"...Don't let their words get to you. I'm fine,"

Look, I be testing stuff and sometimes cool stuff happen unexpectantly. This was my first time pulling this off so I had to clip it. lol.

This was my first time messing with reshade and don't worry. It'll be my last lmaoo.

Link to reading

https://www.inkitt.com/stories/1738674 - Ursinnia Is A Place.

Context:

I am currently going through a foundational phase and writing this book to lead into my bigger book.

Feedback requested:

Currently want to focus on improving my writing's clarity; Things like language, expression, and dialogue.

Right now, I want to ensure that readers can follow and enjoy the story that's being written.

Some questions to think about after reading:

- "Were you able to read through the chapter without getting lost as to what's happening?"

- "Was the dialogue easy to follow? Could you tell who was saying what, to who, and when?"

- "Are the expressions clear to follow? Can you imagine the scenes happening as you read the book? Can you give each character a voice? Can you imagine the rooms they enter, exit, and interact in?"

Extra:

Feel free to also leave what you think about the book and it's characters. If you think it's interesting, too vague, any of those personal critiques you may have; they are also welcomed.

Even if they may feel biased, I'd still like to hear it.