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I’m developing an original adult animated sci-fi workplace comedy called Salvage Moon.

The basic idea is: The galaxy breaks it. They drag it home.

It’s about a blue-collar salvage crew working on an industrial moon junkyard where broken ships, abandoned tech, unpaid assets, illegal parts, corporate mistakes, and weird alien problems all end up.

This is Rivet — a 14-pound Shih Tzu who works the front counter and insists he is not the mascot, not the dog, and definitely not the secretary.

He is the manager.

His comedy lane is: tiny dog body + dirtbag sales-manager ego + desperate need for respect.

He pushes sales, argues over money, talks like he owns the place, and tries to turn every piece of junk in the yard into profit.

Specific feedback I’m looking for: does Rivet feel like a recurring character with real comedy potential, or just a one-note gag? What would you tighten first — his motivation, flaw, role at the yard, or connection to the world?

Honest feedback is welcome.

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I’m working on an original adult animated sci-fi workplace comedy called Salvage Moon, and I’m trying to stress-test one character idea.

This is Rivet — a 14-pound Shih Tzu who insists he is not the dog, not the mascot, and definitely not the secretary.

He is the manager.

He runs the front counter at a salvage yard on an industrial moon, pushes sales way too hard, argues over money, and has a huge respect complex because everyone keeps treating him like a cute little dog instead of the professional he thinks he is.

I’m developing an original adult animated sci-fi workplace comedy called Salvage Moon.

The basic idea is:

The galaxy breaks it. They drag it home.

The show is about a blue-collar salvage crew working on an industrial moon junkyard where broken ships, abandoned tech, unpaid assets, illegal parts, corporate mistakes, and weird alien problems all end up.

It is not a shiny Star Trek future. It is more like if the future got advanced too fast, and regular working people were left cleaning up the mess.

Debt still exists. Bad customers still exist. Corporate greed still exists. Paperwork still exists. Everybody has better technology, but somehow nothing is easier.

This character is Rivet.

He is a 14-pound Shih Tzu who works the front counter at the salvage yard and insists he is not the mascot, not the dog, and definitely not the secretary.

He is the manager.

At least, that is what he keeps telling everybody.

His whole comedy lane is:

tiny dog body + dirtbag sales manager ego + desperate need for respect.

He pushes sales, answers calls, argues over money, talks like he owns the place, and tries to turn every piece of junk in the yard into profit.

He is cute enough to get underestimated, but sleazy enough to use it.

Example line:

“Look at me. This face closes deals. You want me to apologize for good marketing?”

For people who watch or work around adult animation: does the world and character feel like there’s something here? If not, what would you tighten first?

I’m especially interested in whether the world and character feel like they belong together, or if one part is stronger than the other.

Honest feedback is welcome.

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