Been making a bunch of Ocs Lately... Need help with some criticism and advice :p

In case if you are Wondering...

YES...

The Two Characters your seeing above Are actually the Same person...

Infact, It was None other than Zekko himself...

Btw, I need some help and Advice on the Designs of a passion project I've been working on. I just thought I'd show a few of these guys and see what some others think about it!

Also majority of my Characters were heavily inspired by Some Shonen ish anime Characters + with some of them being inspired by some Mythological deities and other media Characters in Fiction :/

Might hopefully one day I can turn it into a manga,comic/Novel , Indie game, or animated series someday....

https://docs.google.com/document/d/151oG-V60WGeY278GWvUqbcmcnkjVVoOe\_htu\_TNQbr4/edit?usp=drivesdk

the Link above is the Doc to my Cosmology btw...

Also, sorry If it's hard to read... But Yeah.. Idk if it was really Big...

Btw, Hope y'all enjoy the Image of my New Oc Above I made :p

Last Image is for Aura moments lol...

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Now for some context...

"The Mindsphere is a realm that houses all platonic ideas that formulate and contribute to the existence of the physical world,it is the set of all human thoughts in the Multiverse as It also exists as a sort of alternate plane of existence, existing alongside the physical world in an abstract state which includes all the physical spatial dimensions that define every iteration of reality and even an infinity of smaller scale narratives of such as the djactuverse. These contradictory and illogical narratives contribute to the larger and infinitely greater pataphysical model that limited these narratives to single canons, including the information that defines said part of reality. Narratives are akin to higher layers of existence and infinitely transcend the last akin to a stack where each higher layer is infinitely greater than the previous and given that The mindsphere contains the platonic forms of aleph numbers, this would suggest that The mindsphere contains an infinite amount of narrative layers, with even basic narratives transcending the physical world and its dimensions, a single mindsphere already contains, Encompasses and transcends countless Dreamworlds And a Single Dreamworld alone also Encompasses, Contains and transcend Countless amounts of Mindscapes...

Note: The Picture your seeing above is the image of how the Mindsphere looks like

Btw here are the tiers So far

Inhabitants:

• Tier I Conceptual/Mindspheric Entities: Concepts that correspond to stories, myths, philosophy, emotions, etc. These concepts represent the second level of the Conceptual Hierarchy and are noted to be inferior in comparison to concepts in higher Tiers due to the inherent subjectivity and the limited influence their concepts have over the human population. Examples of these concepts are The Legends of King Arthur, Little Red Riding Hood, Ronald McDonald, Set Theory, and the Theory of Everything.

• Disembodied Consciousnesses: Sentient beings without a physical body can inhabit the Mindsphere. These are either artificial intelligences that can only interact with digital interfaces or organic intelligences stuck in the Mindsphere. This includes the likes of NAVI.aic and Belasírûs Cäwl.

• Memes: Memetic entities naturally inhabit the Mindsphere. This includes the likes of Trollface, Maxwell the Cat and Chuck Norris.

• Tier II Conceptual/Divine Entities: Concepts corresponding to certain deific entities or religious figures worshipped by humanity. These concepts represent the third level of the Conceptual Hierarchy and are far superior to Tier I Concepts due to their reach being more widespread in comparison, however, their influence is still limited due to the inherent subjective nature of the concept they embody. Examples of these concepts are YHVH (Jenovah), the Abrahamic God, and The Leviathan.

• Memeplexes: More complex memetic structures, complexes of memes collected together. These usually correspond to deific entities worshipped by humans, including “BABZEBULM” and Ceoragah.

• Tier III Conceptual/Essophysical Entities: Concepts corresponding to universal abstracts like Time, Space, Death, Life, etc. These concepts represent the final level of the Mindsphere and are far superior in comparison to both Tier I and II Concepts due to their intrinsic connection with the universe, thus giving them a far wider reach in influence with humanity. Examples of these concepts are the color Red, Death, and Sex.

• Tier IV Conceptual/Extra-Mindspheric Entities: Concepts that correspond to ideas that exist outside of the Mindsphere and can partially intersect with it, affecting the Mindsphere in various ways. Certain examples of these concepts are The Constant of Chaos, ALDARIAH, and the inhabitants of the 5th and 6th Dimension.

So if your Oc were to end up in the Mindsphere, what tier and Threat they should actually end up be in???

Son Zekko vs Son Goku

or???

DOOMSTRIDER vs V1

Idk, What to put here, Might one of my First Actual GOD Deity to be introduced in this sub :p...

Also I don't care if you guys hate it, It still looks kinda cool to me ngl..

also the Square Boxes were supposed to be Narrative Layers btw... Meaning that Aturin is Transcending Countless amounts of these somehow..

#Update : Btw I add a Lore for her incase if you guys are interested in reading it :p

Before the Creation existed, there was a great Void…At some point in this timeless history… a Small egg Hatch, and soon a benevolent cosmic force of creation was born… There it was…

#ATURIN…

…

ATURIN is the unconscious and featureless Concept of Stasis, and the mirror-opposite of FARFOUL,SHe originated in the GODWORLD alongside with her brother FARFOUL, She also represents the disembodied Concept of Change. It is the quintessential force of order and stability, with all possibility, shape, and definition being born from its interplay with FARFOUL, which acts as the primordial chaotic force. ATURIN is a wholly impersonal idea, devoid of all consciousness and cognition, and thus incapable of perceiving itself and reality around it. Therefore, so that ATURIN might know itself, it unconsciously birthed its own subgradient, the ineffable Light of ATi-El, the primordial Embodiment of Existence, ATURIN’s own conscious "soul" and the Soul of All Things.

In truth, however, ATURIN is more than just the disembodied Concept of Stasis, but rather something of far greater significance to all existence. The abstract representation of Stasis called ATURIN is in fact merely a fleeting echo of the infinite unconscious mind that Dreams all things into being, the Godhead known simply as THE PHOENIX. Their distinction is told through metaphor in The Annotated Monurad, a children's religious text which explains the creation of the world in a simplified manner.

The Monurad tells us that originally there were two Siblings, Aturin and Farfoul, who existed alone in a featureless, timeless Void. Through their interplay of Light (WAS) and Darkness (WAS-NOT) a third being is CHAOS, XERITH (The FACELESS ONE), the creative principle and the origin of all possibility. and soon, Aturin and XERITH fall in love together, and she becomes pregnant with her seed. However, Farfoul also loved XERITH, jealous by his Sister’s proposal and enraged by XERITH’s own betrayal and rejection, murders her as she was giving birth to XERITH's children. However, Aturin, managing to survive the assault, then proceeds to strike back at her brother, and murders him in turn. Finally, Aturin is left alone, with XERITH bringing thier Child with him Now abandoning her alone, with a broken mind and a grieving heart, and so she hides himself in the Sun, and begins to Dream.

However, the story of the Monurad is both heavily symbolic and extremely simplified, and in no way meant to be taken literally. Whether ATURIN, FARFOUL, and XERITH were actual living beings or merely illustrative metaphors is unknown, and ultimately irrelevant. What is known is that the betrayal of Both XERITH and FARFOUL filled ATURIN with such grief that, She descends into a state of cosmic sensory deprivation, where she fell into eternal sleep. Through this act, ATURIN flowered into ADRAMAH, becoming the Godhead that Dreams the World, ATU ANEW AE I.

ATURIN's Dream is one of mourning, with FARFOUL's Primal Enragement - her mutual crying of simultaneous childbirth and death - echoing through every level of existence as a Song, resulting in an endlessly echoing pattern of betrayal, death, and suffering. Within its own Dream, ATURIN is represented as Aturin, the featureless Concept of Stasis, with its brother FARFOUL representing the opposing Concept of Change. The PHOENIX itself is represented as the resulting Grey Maybe between, the The Akarah, literally meaning "The Cycle of life and Death" in ØVÄRÜ, a perfect representation of the love both Siblings shared, and killed each other for.

Till this day… Aturin acts as the unseen guiding force who helps Sadie (Violet) to confront and defeat the “The Beak Ripper” While also helping her to become a MESSIAH, A force for good, while also Helping and Saving children from being consumed by the forces of CHAOS…

Although she rarely intervenes directly, Aturin will always play a major key role in maintaining the cosmic balance of the entire Creation itself…Aturin does not grant miracles or change fate, but rather is the vessel through which all things are possible. So long as Aturin exists, there’s a chance for the existence of life, of luck, of fate, for trees to grow and waters to flow. To give praise to Aturin, then, is to give praise to all deities, and to show gratitude for the existence of life itself. It is up to the gods — and by extension, the Sepent. Even when she's asleep…She will always be on Her Messiah's side… She Protects, Not because She Choose this fate, Because she can't let the Forces of CHAOS win…Without Her…not just humanity, but the whole entirety of Creation and everything beyond would cease to be: humans, life, Ideas,consciousness, everything would have been long gone. Although her Griefs Continues to stay within her even when she is asleep, Aturin still fights for all of the Lesser Beings, even in their fall.

Also Aturin is Genderless btw, But im more leaning it towards a She rather than a He somehow...

In a wounded valley that had once been a part of the Black sea…

A Self proclaimed God arrives…

There was nothing but…

Confidence in her eyes…

She threw reality itself into disarray,

and bend and twisted the Laws of the entire existence,

to bring upon an Untold destruction…

The Earth, trembled by its presence, froze as The Cracks and Broken rifts upon the sky Continued to Disarray, as the Air Screamed with pure Terror…

Darkness, Descends down upon the Fallen world…

…

She Awoke, She refused…

She will never stop…

She will Forever…

Continue…

AGAIN…

AGAIN…

AGAIN…

AGAIN…

AGAIN…

AGAIN…

AGAIN…

AGAIN…

And…

TRANSCEND…

ASCEND…

ASCEND…

ASCEND…

ASCEND…

ASCEND…

ASCEND…

ASCEND…

ërrør…

#“LOOP???”

…

The world… Is Burning … it's now a Script to her eyes…

However…

She refused…

She did not suffice…

She refused to accept…

She refused to succumb…

Until her eyes rested on a Nothingness that lasted forever…

However it never lasts long…

The stars will never wait for you, my child. When you took my power, when you burned yourself in the skies above, they looked upon you and felt nothing. The stars did not wait for anyone, nor humanity, for all of the promise it showed, for all of the promise others saw in them. But what of the cost? What about your family?,What about your friends?,What about Me???

We are, I am, by all accounts and possible qualifications, the greatest monster this world has ever saw. Perhaps that any world saw. And yet, You, I see now that the stars wait for us. For me. Where is the justice in that? Seek it not, for there is none. But the fact remains my child . The stars do not wait for me. But they wait for you. To take them into your embrace.

I suspect I shall not be long, but everyone deserves a Second Chance…

SAVE THEM…

SAVE ALL…

MY MESSIAH…

Take the SUN, and protect it with all your will & Heart, Until the end, For I am Light and Life incarnate. Now and Forever… I AM ATURIN THE LAST PHOENIX…

Red pill or Blue pill???

Btw How Far can Your Oc Run the Gauntlet??? and Can they Defeat the DOOMSTRIDER themselves???

Also keep in mind, this is “COSMOLOGY EQUALIZED” Otherwise this is just gonna be a One sided manslaughter for my Oc, Knowing that Most of the Ocs in this Sub doesn't possesses such Large Cosmology as Mines, Also Knowing how big my Cosmology is, Yea, I'm pretty sure 90% of your Oc is not gonna make it through R1 so yeah, it's just best to Equalize the Cosmology to keep it Fair somehow…

also the Doc and Link Below gives you a Description on the DOOMSTRIDER btw...

https://docs.google.com/document/d/15F4wlTASwT\_dqrI6xWbFtNfF3xxYAK\_4GSdsJ97NKL0/edit?usp=drivesdk

R1 : DOOMSTRIDER is Deployed (No Weapons, No anything, No powers… Just Himself and his Fists… ) “Good luck to the street levels ig???)

R2 : Same as R1, But DOOMSTRIDER gets his Powers, But NO Weapons…

R3 : Same as R1 But DOOMSTRIDER gets his Basic weponaries but No strong Weapons or anything

R4: Same as R2 but DOOMSTRIDER gets his Weapons,yes… That Includes His most powerful and Strongest Weaponaries and Power ups but NO Powers and His Dreadsword

R5 : DOOMSTRIDER Only gets his Spaceship instead

R6 : DOOMSTRIDER Now Gets Only His Dreadsword fuse with a Z'TARUS Shard

R7: Same as R1 but DOOMSTRIDER Is Now in the IMMACROSM (Good luck to Multi to Outerversal Characters ig???)

R8 : Same as R7 But DOOMSTRIDER is Now all out and Bloodlusted+ He gets all of his Equipments, Strongest Weaponaries, His Spaceship and the Dreadsword… ( Good luck guys)

Bonus round: If Your Oc were to Encounter the DOOMSTRIDER, What Would their First reaction be???

Also remember "NO Boundless"

Btw his Lore is in the Doc link below btw, Hope you guys can see it :p

https://docs.google.com/document/d/15F4wlTASwT\_dqrI6xWbFtNfF3xxYAK\_4GSdsJ97NKL0/edit?usp=drivesdk

sorry if I was late for posting this, been but lately smh...

Also sorry for the shitty quality...

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Blood is Slaughter,

Pain is futile,

Dread is endless,

Prophecy is fulfilled,

Salvation is Needed,

CHAOS is for the weak,

Let mankind Cry,

and Hell shall die...

...

WAR IS MY MASTER

DEATH IS MY MISTRESS...”

~ "DOOMSTRIDER" Herald to the OLDERIANS

(Also before you guys ask anything... Doomguy = Primarch space Marine = Master Chief = Combine soldier = Samus = Necrons = V1 = Ahh looking type design...)

How many of y'all know me???

https://docs.google.com/document/d/1UXiRAhOmSa\_5Fnf5gjPgKg3gEdByuGiTfj3Z-A7Xl3Q/edit?usp=drivesdk

Here's the link and Doc to thier Lore... (sorry if it was unfinished or if the doc was a bit hard for you to read)

also the First symbol represents the SOLARIANS, while the Second one represents the OLDERIANS btw :p

Is this Accurate???

So in a short summary...

IN A VERY LOOOOOOONG TIME AGO (DURING THE 21ST MILIANA)

A Race of Human Cavemen people Originating from an Alternate Earth in another Universe gets Invaded by another Human race from an Alternate Earth in another Universe But they have Very Advance tech and stuff so they decided to show the Cavemen people and teach them how to learn and use their Advance tech and Magic and stuff. The Advance Human race Says bye, bye to the Cavemen people and Leaves their earth, Cavemen people gets Inspired and they decided to create their Own technology and Magic and as time passes on, and thus, The Cavemen people became a race of Powerful Mages known as the “SOLARIANS”. A young and highly technological advanced race focusing on Worshipping the Light itself.

However, One day their Sun ends up changing because of a specific event which led to Not only their Sun but also the entire universe to emit Gamma rays that turns their Earth and whole Solar system/Galaxy into a Highly radioactive planet wasteland which gives them Cancer and other Painful Mutations, And thus, They have extremely low life spans for which is one of the reason they become such a hateful race. Being Desperate enough,The SOLARIANS use their Highly Advanced tech to travel across the Multiverse and end up meeting a Race of Highly powerful Multiversal Creator like Gods known as “THE ANCIENTS ONES”. The SOLARIANS beg the Ancients to help them but the Ancients are like… “HAHA, LOL NOPE” and the SOLARIANS are like..”YOU KNOW WHAT, F#CK YOU” and they decided to go War against them but gets crushed so badly until a Group of very powerful Gods Known as the ”Z’TARUS” decided to come forward and said ”AY,YO WANNA MAKE A DEAL WITH US???” and the SOLARIANS are like ”SURE WHY NOT???” and thus they made a Deal with them and undergo a ritual of “Metatransference” where they end up traded their Souls With Giant Mechanical machine like bodies made with a highly indestructible and Invulnerable material known as “NEUTRONIUM” (A material made from a Core of a Broken Star Located in the Ideatic space of the Axiom areas around the corners of the Universe itself) and Soon the cold, ruthless and emotionless Race of a Hyper-advanced ancient civilization known as the ”OLDERIANS” are born.

Now with the help of their Z'TARUS creators, They turn the tides of the War itself against the Ancients and emerge Victorious in the end, However the OLDERIANS, Unsatisfied by their victory decided to seek revenge and rebelled against their Z'TARUS Creators, Using the energies of the Great Firmament, They shattered their Z'TARUS masters into countless pieces, trapping them into multiple ancient artifacts, tesseract prisons and Statues. However, the most notable one of all is the ”DRAGON ORBS” which are very powerful Artifacts that acts as the Remnants and Prison to the Leader of the Z'TARUS group known as ”SOLARIS”. Now with the Dragon orbs, The OLDERIANS used it to activate the WELL OF EDEN believing that by using the Well of Eden, They were able to find a solution to reverse their Metatransference and restore their original organic bodies back, However, one of the priest of the OLDERIAN race gaze into the Well and witness a GODLIKE figure descending down Into their world in the next Thousands of years, promising that he will restore them back to their original selves and reversing the Metatransference effects. Believing that the God may be the key to their salvation, the OLDERIANS pray for the next Thousands of years to come for the Deity's arrival. However, One of the Last leaders and Kings of the OLDERIAN race, “Tenzeeth”, believe that the deity might end up trying to Deceive them just like what their Z'TARUS masters did. Fearing for the Safety of his own kind, He believes that the Deity's arrival might potentially be another threat to their own kind and so for the next Thousands of years to come, He alongside With his other OLDERIAN Followers prepared for the worst to come, and after 1000 thousand years the Day has finally arrived…

in the first Hours the OLDERIANS gathered all of their army and Tech preparing for the arrival…

There a Glowing yet, Bright figure emerges from the sky of their World and He tells them not to be scared, He introduces himself as none other than the “GOD OF LIGHT”, “SEFIROS” and tried to be nice to them However, Tenzeeth, Slowly took advantage of his kindness before unleashing his army and Ambushing straight towards to SEFIROS. SEFIROS tried to fight back either by Erasing them from all points of Existence itself, However the Numbers of the OLDERIAN race were Far too much for him to handle, in the end He was captured and Brutally Tortured with his light pieces leaking out, As the OLDERIANS tried to Shatter SEFIROS into Billions of pieces, they end up Creating an Artifact that allows them to Control the Entire aspect of their Reality and Narrative itself and thus, The “OMNI CRYSTAL” are Born…

SEFIROS seeks to fight back and manages to barely escape from being shattered, he returns back to the “GODZONE”, Now being Horribly traumatized and Mentally Scarred by the events that happened to him before… Now being calmed by his Sister, “LUNARIS”. He seeks to return back to the OLDERIANS to seek revenge, Now heavily bloodlusted, despite being heavily weakened, The amount of power the OLDERIANS have thrown at SEFIROS are No match… SEFIROS is Just Too Damn angry to Lose… However LUNARIS, Decided to Confront the enraged and rampaging SEFIROS, trying to calm him down as possible however SEFIROS was to aggressive to even calm down, as if almost like he Has gone Insane or he has turned into a Wild rampaging animal (Probably due to his unsatisfiable Hate towards the OLDERIANS for what they had done to him in the past).

However LUNARIS, with No other Choice Fought against and Transported SEFIROS across the Infinite Cosmos in another Plane of existence, Their Battle was So intense that Not Only their Clash Shook the Entire Multiverse and the Existence itself But also Shattered the entire Reality and Countless other Narrative Worlds into small fragment of pieces of dust, Reducing Everything into nothing and leaving a only a Dark Blank Void behind, this fight continues intensely as The two Continues the Fight ranging from Throwing and chuckling Multiverses and Narratives at each other, However SEFIROS having Enough with the Fight, Decided to finally end things all, There they are Close to the WORLD TREE itself, SEFIROS threaten to LUNARIS that He was going to end The entire Reality itself by committing a Self Suicide attack, LUNARIS Telling SEFIROS not to do it However SEFIROS was like “IDGAF” and in the end, SEFIROS committed an act of cosmic suicide Ultimately causing a Huge Big bang Like attack that Shook the WORLD TREE itself. LUNARIS decided to use all of her Full power and shielded the attack from spreading through the World Tree and Nearly Died in the process… In the end all What's left remains of SEFIROS is his Remnants of Shards and Pieces floating in the endless Axioms… The spot where SEFIROS exploded on Slowly gave birth to a New world, A world with a Beauty scenery and Crystal Clear Water… Finally, ZETRIYUS is born…

Once again, I have added most of my Ocs in the Tier list, also Title says it all guys...