First Poem Written In Years - Ratings and Critiques?
A Visit - Draft 1
Sunk in sand; I can never quit
I’ve spent a thousand days in this pit
Waiting as the time goes by
it weeps
I’d do anything for real sleep
Lights flash forth and back and I wait for it to pass
It doesn’t.
Circle Circle Circle down below my hips
call it an ellipse
I freeze alive!
provided and deprived
Ravished; in my own head.
I can’t - won’t - forget that pool of sweat
and those seven sets
I hear the voice of a man
whilst I am scorched on blistering sand.
“Hermaphrodite, you know what you did. I am god
And I Forbid.”
His verses echo out of me; spoken in a rasp,
and I know I am waiting for his wrath
Shivering as I burn before forty-nine eyes
I die alive!
succubi?
(its about my shitty sleep paralysis lol)
u/Dependent-Hedgehog57 — 1 day ago