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“It concerns me is all,”

I forced myself to say

As the weight of my words he shrugs away.

-

And his face shoots up.

A crossed X forms

In the glance thrown my way.

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“A drunkard I am not,

I shall drink as I say.”

I’ll let it be another day.

-

“Maybe you’re right,” I beg myself to say.

Have you brought a horse to water

If it’s only halfway?

-

I searched for a story to lull me away.

If it were a matter of life and death

He wouldn’t be this way.

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But the night last he was taken bad.

Six stabs up along his arm

And the skin healed fast but the scar did stay.

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Truth be, it were a matter of life and death

Truth be, I knew it till his grave

Now he is too late to save

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Sorry I dont know how to keep the verses separate so Ive used hypons,

Please be as brutal as you like!

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