Title: Gush of Greed
Format: Feature
Page Length: 3 (opening scene)
Genres: Surrealist Thriller, horror, atmospheric
Logline: In a surreal town where wealth and life are parlayed away for the thrill of change, a travelling failed salesman is tasked with designing a game of absolute greed to satisfy the appetites of gluttonous elites.
Feedback Concerns: Wanted to bounce thoughts on the opening scene and critique of the format, theme and the dialogue. Importantly, does it hook you in?
I completed the initial draft of my first screenplay about a month ago and I just started on the rewrite, would love to get some constructive criticism.
TW: Animal cruelty, violence
https://drive.google.com/file/d/1VuhZwGA8sI5P8FcLgsBJt4jaUeTUJQ5K/view?usp=sharing