u/CaptainSlow18

Hi everyone - first time vistor to this thread, tired of having a book idea in their head and doing nothing with it.

I've just finished the first act (Prologue and first two chapters) of a sci-fi/cosmic horror novel I'm working on called Disbelief. I would love some eyes other than my own ,on it to let me know how the pacing and atmosphere feel.

Im not that confident in my writing style this is my first time writing since school, that was a long time ago. just looking for feedback on if the slow burning horror is ok , the pacing is fine.
Does the character feel real? would you want to read more if it something worth carrying on with.

There is a lot more to this story which ive yet to lay out but here is the details of it below.

Thank you in advance

Tagline

When a colossal, dead God appears in the sky, plunging the world into a slow-burn apocalypse, a cynical theology professor is drafted by a shadowy UN task force to figure out what happens to reality when the creator dies.

Summary/Blurb

Professor Phineas Jupet has spent his entire life studying faith—which is ironic, considering he doesn't have any. But on a scorching June afternoon, a colossal, twisted figure appears in the sky, eclipsing the sun. It resembles the Creator from Michelangelo's famous painting, but with one horrifying difference: He is dead.

As the world descends into a quiet, stuttering apocalypse, humanity realizes another terrifying truth. Cameras, radar, and machines cannot see the giant; they only record primordial static. The dead God can only be seen with human eyes, and simply looking at Him radiates a physical, soul-crushing "Dread."

While religions collapse and society slowly gives up, Phineas is perfectly content to ride out the end of the world with a cider hangover. But when a mysterious government task force kicks down his door, citing his forgotten university thesis on the cosmos, Phineas is dragged into a battle not just for humanity's survival, but for the fundamental rules of reality itself.