Hi everyone,
I’m looking for thoughtful beta readers for the first chapter of a novel I’m working on.
Genre: Literary mystery / slow-burn psychological thriller
Tone: Atmospheric, introspective, tension-driven (not action-heavy)
Length: Chapter 1 (~2100 words)
Premise (short):
A researcher who studies ancient texts receives a package containing a fragment of carved stone — only to realize it’s part of a message meant specifically for him… and that someone else has already seen it.
The story is set in Wad Madani, Sudan, with a strong focus on atmosphere, perception, and quiet tension.
Note:
This is an AI-assisted draft, but the structure, direction, and editing are fully guided by me.
What I’d really like feedback on:
Does the opening hook your attention?
Does the pacing feel intentionally slow or just slow?
Does the setting feel real and immersive?
Is Amin (the main character) engaging enough to follow?
Would you continue reading?
If you're interested, I’d really appreciate your time and honest feedback.