Hi everyone! I’ve been reading through posts here and found the feedback incredibly helpful. I’ve had some agent interest in this project, but received notes that the word count is on the higher side, so I’m currently revising it down. I’d love to get some additional eyes on my query—thank you in advance!
Dear [Agent Name],
I am seeking representation for Beneath His Obsession, a complete 90,000 word romantic, psychological thriller. It will appeal to readers of Verity and Lights Out, combining obsessive romance with high-stakes suspense.
Daniella Caldwell still hears the crack of her husband’s skull when she shoved him away in self-defense. She was certain he was dead. But when the police arrived, his body was gone. Everyone says her husband abandoned her—but Dani knows what she saw… and what she did.
Six months later, Dani is rebuilding her life. Her dream of publishing murder mysteries is finally a reality. But as her career rises, bodies begin appearing, each staged exactly like her books.
Killian Hawthorne has been watching Dani longer than she knows. Quiet and attentive, he becomes the one person she trusts with her writing struggles. But when he steps in to protect her from a violent encounter, that protection turns into something far more dangerous. To help Dani “research” the methods she’s stuck on, Killian begins eliminating the men who threaten her, staging each murder to match her work—and prove her methods are flawless.
When Detective Nolan Pierce connects Dani’s novels to active homicide cases, he becomes convinced the impossible accuracy isn’t a coincidence. After losing everything, he fixates on Dani, determined to prove she’s responsible. As his obsession escalates, Dani is forced to confront a terrifying possibility: she may not be the victim she thought she was. After all, she already believes she killed her husband, and now the bodies are piling up.
As the evidence mounts and fiction begins bleeding into reality, the truth waiting in the shadows threatens to destroy everything she’s built.
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Thank you for your time and consideration.