Did I Write Viserys fate well?
Context: current fic, Old Gods and The Seven drop Westeros and other continents on Marvel/DC/Harry Potter fused Earth. Only a small bit showing what happens to Viserys, the chapter is much longer.
Will later go and actually give Viserys more dialogue later as I polish it
Danaerys followed after her brother nervously through the halls after they had slipped away from the Witch tour guide, followed closely by Aegon, the boy Jon Connington claimed was their nephew.
A lot had changed in 5 years, it had all started when the slaving cities had fallen, Daenarys having later learned that the other cities had taken them down or they'd been taken down inside, the other cities claimed they had done it by themselves, but everyone knew they had been backed by these new 'nations' that claimed that Essos and Westeros had mysteriously ended up on their planet one day, something Viserys had scoffed at.
That changed when the foreigners could be seen flying over the skies, metal birds that did not flap their wings and others that they claimed could leave the planet, something Viserys had said they were just claiming to boast their power.
That all changed when Dragons could be seen flying over the skies, Viserys had been pleased, then enraged when he learned there was an entire civilization of witches and Wizards that harvested Dragons and used them for other stuff. Viserys had found one of the Wizarding buildings in Essos one day and stormed in, screaming how they were unworthy of dragons and that they should hand them over to him as he had the blood of the dragon. They'd been unceremoniously thrown out, Viserys screaming the whole time and demanding they unhand him.
Daenarys watched as Viserys entered one of the pits where a dragon, a 'hungarian horntail' was, Aegon and Daenarys looking at each other in fear as Viserys tried to claim the beast, the dragon looking unimpressed as if Viserys was an insect, Viserys going red with rage as he started yelling at the dragon, yelling that he was the blood of the dragon and it should submit to him, the dragon turning to face him fully now, Viserys smiling, clearly pleased and thinking that it was listening.
The next second Viserys was engulfed in flames, screaming as the dragon snapped him up in its massive maw, shaking its head furiously, the bottom half of Viserys flying in the air after being ripped away from the rest of her brother's body, the dragon snagging that from the air also as Daenarys started screaming at the sight of her brother being eaten