Hi,
I have never done this or even thought about this but my friend suggested looking into this subreddit before going on my second query journey to see what others thought of my query letter. So yeah, I don’t really know what I am doing here, but I have queried once before. I took the feedback I got from that and applied it to my letter and manuscript—now I’m ready to try again.
This is my fresh, brand new query letter. Please provide feedback on where to improve or if you think this is ready to be sent out.
(Obviously there is one part where I left space to personalize a paragraph for each agent so hope that makes sense)
Thanks!
Dear ____,
What if the rules meant to protect you are the ones holding you back?
I am thrilled to reach out to you about my 110,000-word adult romantic fantasy, The Last of Spring that blends the court intrigue and emotional intensity of From Blood and Ash with the rebellion and high-stakes power struggles of Red Queen. It is an expansive story of identity, power, and forbidden romance set against a fractured fae court. The Last of Spring stands alone but offers strong series potential.
Xylia has spent her entire life obeying those rules. Some were given to her by her adoptive family; others she built for herself just to survive. They are the only thing that has ever made her feel safe in a life where she never truly belonged. But on the night of her twenty-first birthday, she breaks them for the first time.
Dragged into the fae lands of Ellarissa, Xylia learns the impossible truth: she is Azalea, the lost heir of the Spring Court, hidden away in the mortal realm after her parents’ deaths. Now she is bound to Prince Helio of the High Court—the man who will one day be king.
In a glittering world of power and deception, Helio offers her extravagance and a future built on obedience. But his control tightens as whispers of rebellion spread, and when she meets his mysterious brother, Prince Theros, Xylia begins to see the truth of the courts she’s been pulled into—and the life being chosen for her.
As her magic awakens, Xylia is forced to confront a dangerous choice: remain Helio’s queen, or claim a throne that was never meant to be his. To survive, she will have to do the one thing she has spent her entire life avoiding—stop following the rules and start breaking them.
I was excited to see your interest in (agent interest). The Last of Spring (fill in with things that match wishlist. Make this new and original per agent every time)
Though this would be my debut, storytelling has always been a source of joy for me. Writing The Last of Spring helped me reconnect with that passion and solidify my commitment to pursuing a career as an author. I’m excited to continue developing new stories and bringing this world to life.
Thank you for your time and consideration. I would be delighted to send any additional materials at your request.
Warm regards,
(Personal and contact info here)