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Title: Tales of Roshandere

Genre: Fantasy

Format: TV 60-min pilot

Logline: As a hidden evil creeps closer to engulfing the magical land of Roshandere, four individuals, each driven by a personal motive and burdened by a past they can’t outrun, set out to participate in the Dominion Pinnacle, a brutal competition across treacherous lands, only to be drawn into a scheme they never chose, with the fate of the world hanging in the balance.

https://drive.google.com/file/d/12rDqEl2gthiW9DTYgA8fmePt_jtvBt9k/view?usp=sharing

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