u/-LittleWarrior

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I’m a new poet, and I’d love some feedback!!! <3

My (pen) name is Lonan, and I write many themes of poetry. Romance, some mature stuff, horror, fantasy, cutesy, haiku (is planned!), I even take requests, FOR FREE! I write about close to anything within reason! I also believe that love is the foundation of life. Criticism is completely okay, and I'd love to hear it! I'll show a stanza from one of my poems, id love to hear what yall think!

I'm "6heretostay6" by the way if you're interested!
Poem Title: Decaying Midas
Collection: Contritious Lullabies

Fairy tales are comforting—similar to a dream,
Tears in my eyes every night the voices scream, Seems as if I had been stripped of a swell ending, Townsfolk expect me to be the Prince Charming, Although all I ever can accomplish is to fall apart, Never will I be worthy of a fresh and fairer start,
I must grow up and become the man King wants, Always daunting whilst the echoes keep taunting, The Queen is far from hopeful-nor maternal,
While The King-completely selfish and stalling,
Am I enough to defeat the monster demanding,
Or am I absolutely worthless and short standing?

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u/-LittleWarrior — 3 days ago
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I’m a new poet, and I would love for some feedback!

My (pen) name is Lonan, and I write many themes of poetry. Romance, some mature stuff, horror, fantasy, cutesy, haiku (is planned!), I even take requests, FOR FREE! I’ll write about close to anything within reason! I also believe that love is the foundation of life. Criticism is completely okay, and I’d love to hear it! I’ll show a stanza from one of my poems, id love to hear what yall think!

I’m “6heretostay6” by the way if you’re interested!

Poem Title: Decaying Midas
Collection: Contritious Lullabies

Fairy tales are comforting—similar to a dream,
Tears in my eyes every night the voices scream,
Seems as if I had been stripped of a swell ending,
Townsfolk expect me to be the Prince Charming,
Although all I ever can accomplish is to fall apart,
Never will I be worthy of a fresh and fairer start,
I must grow up and become the man King wants,
Always daunting whilst the echoes keep taunting,
The Queen is far from hopeful—nor maternal,
While The King—completely selfish and stalling,
Am I enough to defeat the monster demanding,
Or am I absolutely worthless and short standing?

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u/-LittleWarrior — 3 days ago
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I am a new poet, and I would luv some feedback!!

My (pen) name is Lonan, and I write many themes of poetry. Romance, some mature stuff, horror, fantasy, cutesy, haiku (is planned!), I even take requests, FOR FREE! I’ll write about close to anything within reason! I also believe that love is the foundation of life. Criticism is completely okay, and I’d love to hear it! I’ll show a stanza from one of my poems, id love to hear what yall think!

I’m “6heretostay6” by the way if you’re interested!

Poem Title: Decaying Midas
Collection: Contritious Lullabies

Fairy tales are comforting—similar to a dream,
Tears in my eyes every night the voices scream,
Seems as if I had been stripped of a swell ending,
Townsfolk expect me to be the Prince Charming,
Although all I ever can accomplish is to fall apart,
Never will I be worthy of a fresh and fairer start,
I must grow up and become the man King wants,
Always daunting whilst the echoes keep taunting,
The Queen is far from hopeful—nor maternal,
While The King—completely selfish and stalling,
Am I enough to defeat the monster demanding,
Or am I absolutely worthless and short standing?

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u/-LittleWarrior — 3 days ago
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(I wrote this! :D )

This plague haunts me deep from within,
It buries me deeper than each of my sins,
I look around only to see that I am bound,
Left crying without any decibels of sound,
My mind is akin to a desecrated chapel,
If I die would I consume a poison apple?

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u/-LittleWarrior — 11 days ago
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This plague haunts me deep from within,
It buries me deeper than each of my sins,
I look around only to see that I am bound,
Left crying without any decibels of sound,
My mind is akin to a desecrated chapel,
If I die would I consume a poison apple?

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u/-LittleWarrior — 11 days ago
▲ 1

This plague haunts me deep from within,
It buries me deeper than each of my sins,
I look around only to see that I am bound,
Left crying without any decibels of sound,
My mind is akin to a desecrated chapel,
If I die would I consume a poison apple?

reddit.com
u/-LittleWarrior — 11 days ago